영작교정
목록
완료

Monday

Hi teacher
finally its monday
in last weekends, i met friends who didt see each other during a long time
we drunk until at 3 a.m
so next day i spent whole of day for sleeping ...
I really dont like to spend much time for just sleeping but this day i feel my body is getting weak
whenever i dont have enought sleep i cant act nomarlly
Is it beacuse i m get to be worker like most of korea father?
For this reason, i think i have to excersice regularly and care my body more carfully this day
How about you? do you have any concern this day?
anyway see you after 20 min :D

 

Hi teacher

finally its monday 

Finally, it’s Monday! (Please consider Punctuation marks and Capitalization)


in last weekends, i met friends who didt see each other during a long time

Last weekend, I met friends whom I didn’t able to be with for quite some time now.

(Please read on how you can use “whom” instead of “who”: http://www.grammarbook.com/grammar/whoVwhom.asp )

 

we drunk until at 3 a.m

We drank until 3 am. (“Drunk” is an adjective, for example: I smelled his breathe, and I can conclude that he was drunk. While “Drank” is a verb or action work and it’s the simple past tense of “Drink”. )

so next day i spent whole of day for sleeping ...

So on the next day, I spent the whole day sleeping.

                    
I really dont like to spend much time for just sleeping but this day i feel my body is getting weak

I didn’t really like to spend much of my time just sleeping, but I was really feeling weak that day.

(Please be mindful of your tenses of verb, you can always review the notes I gave you about Tenses of Verbs.)


whenever i dont have enought sleep i cant act nomarlly 

Whenever I don’t get enough of sleep, I couldn’t act as normal as usual.


Is it beacuse i m get to be worker like most of korea father?

(I’m sorry but I don’t understand what you mean by this sentence.)

 


For this reason, i think i have to excersice regularly and care my body more carfully this day 

For this reason, I think I have to exercise regularly and take care of my body more this day.

(You should always watch out for redundancy of words. Or those words which you repeated twice or more in one sentence. In your sentence you already used the word care and you still used carefully, you must consider other term or word.)


How about you? do you have any concern this day?

How about you, do you have any concerns today?

 

anyway see you after 20 min :D

Anyway, see you after 20 mins.


수강정보
필리핀 전화영어 주 3회 10분 4주
교재
Speak Your Mind 1 (Senior Course)
[시니어] 프리토킹
번호
제목
작성자
튜터
작성일
4599
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] hello
Joy
-
2023.05.23
4598
완료
[2번째 영작 첨삭] cooking class
roa om
-
2023.05.23
4597
완료
[11번째 영작 첨삭] Multicultural
Rachel
-
2023.05.22
4596
완료
[10번째 영작 첨삭] Countries
Rachel
-
2023.05.22
4595
완료
[20번째 영작 첨삭] Girl's soccer play
Christina
Mary Grace
2023.05.22
4594
완료
[19번째 영작 첨삭] Girl's soccer play
Christina
Mary Grace
2023.05.22
4593
완료
[11번째 영작 첨삭] W p.19
John
-
2023.05.22
4592
완료
[113번째 영작 첨삭] The world with no feelings.
-
-
2023.05.22
4591
완료
[9번째 영작 첨삭] My dog :)
Rachel
Charm
2023.05.22
4590
완료
[6번째 영작 첨삭] amusement park
David
Flei
2023.05.22
4589
완료
[2번째 영작 첨삭] Piano concert
NIEL
Cha
2023.05.22
4588
완료
[18번째 영작 첨삭] Ian became kind
jung ha youn
Yumi
2023.05.21
4587
완료
[11번째 영작 첨삭] What is your favorite movie?
yoonkyu
-
2023.05.19
4586
완료
[18번째 영작 첨삭] The girl's soccer
Christina
Mary Grace
2023.05.19
4585
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] 20230518 diary
Charlie
Jana
2023.05.19
4584
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] It's not easy to make money.
Amy
South
2023.05.18
4583
완료
[3번째 영작 첨삭] controling the temper
Jane
Melissa
2023.05.18
4582
완료
[9번째 영작 첨삭] F1 race cars
Rachel
-
2023.05.17
4581
완료
[17번째 영작 첨삭] A social task
Christina
Mary Grace
2023.05.17
4580
완료
[8번째 영작 첨삭] Nice to meet you :)
Rachel
Charm
2023.05.17

초대한 친구가 수업을 등록하면
무료 수업 1회를 드려요!

무료 수업 1회
초대한 친구가 회원 가입 및 수강권 결제 후 수업을 등록하면
두 사람 모두 무료 수업 1회 수강권을 받아요!
Step 01. 조이영어로 친구를 초대해 보세요!
https://joy05.co.kr
Step 02. 인증하기
초대한 친구가 수업 등록을 완료하면, 고객센터로 수업을 등록한 친구의 '아이디' 또는 '이름 + 휴대폰 번호 뒷자리'를 남겨주세요!
*자녀 혹은 학부모 이름으로 가입하신 경우, 실제 회원가입하신 수강생 이름으로 적어주세요!
Ex. 친구 아이디: joy5205 / 친구 이름: 김조이, 9876
Step 03. 혜택받기
고객센터를 통해 인증하신 내용이 확인되면, 혜택을 적용해드립니다!

Zoom 화상수업 가이드

1. Zoom 설치하기
아래 링크에 접속하여 Zoom 프로그램을 설치합니다.
2. 수강실 입장하기
1) 조이영어 홈페이지 로그인 후 강의실에서 [수강실 입장] 버튼을 클릭해주세요.
2) 버튼을 누르고 Zoom 프로그램 열기 허용 → 컴퓨터 오디오로 참가를 누르면 튜터와 연결됩니다.
3. Zoom 이용에 다른 문의사항이 있으신가요?
조이영어 학습매니저에게 연락주시면 수업에 관련된 문의사항을 친절히 상담해드리겠습니다.
  • 카카오톡 상담 채널 : @조이영어
  • 조이영어 고객센터 : 1899-8695 (운영시간 : 월~금 9:00~17:30)

이용약관

개인정보취급방침