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As you know early stage of company growth, in term of HR, we should focus on HRM, such as compensation, regulation, hiring etc.
If Basic things are stabilized, after that we should focus on HRD. That is why Santen Korea hired HRD Expert.
If you think it is necessary to develop and to concentrate our resource to HRD, yes, I think regional HRD role is necessary. And within current situation, he is good choice.
However, I have 2 concern points about this.
First, some kinds of aspect, this is very sensitive, especially related to his IDP. So I have to discuss this with him and his willing is important.
And the other thing is as I mentioned, SKR needs is clear. it means we have to focus on HRD now.
So if he will take over the role, naturally his work scope and volume will be increase. Due to this, I don’t like that it affects SKR’s HRD task. It means, poor performance and delays in SKR HRD. SKR management also wouldn’t like that kinds of situation.


First of all, thank you for your proposal. For me, I think it is good career opportunity.
The concern is, as you know, I am not native speaker. So even though I have good experiences and knowledge about HR, it is difficult to refer it fully to our coworkers, regional member.
And Santen Korea is the biggest company and has a lot of task to sustained growth.
I already shared my task for this year and besides those, there are a lot of operational work in Korea. So time and resource is not enough.

As you know early stage of company growth, in term of HR, we should focus on HRM, such as compensation, regulation, hiring etc.
If Basic things are stabilized, after that we should focus on HRD. That is why Santen Korea hired HRD Expert.
If you think it is necessary to develop and to concentrate our resource to HRD, yes, I think regional HRD role is necessary. And within current situation, he is good choice.
However, I have 2 concern points about this.
First, some kinds of aspect, this is very sensitive, especially related to his IDP. So I have to discuss this with him and his willing is important.
And the other thing is as I mentioned, SKR needs is clear. it means we have to focus on HRD now.
So if he will take over the role, naturally his work scope and volume will be increase. Due to this, I don’t like that it affects SKR’s HRD task. It means, poor performance and delays in SKR HRD. SKR management also wouldn’t like that kinds of situation.


First of all, thank you for your proposal. For me, I think it is good career opportunity.
The concern is, as you know, I am not native speaker. So even though I have good experiences and knowledge about HR, it is difficult to refer it fully to our coworkers, regional member.
And Santen Korea is the biggest company and has a lot of task to sustained growth.
I already shared my task for this year and besides those, there are a lot of operational work in Korea. So time and resource is not enough.

 

 

CORRECTION : 

As you know, the early stages of a company growth, in terms of the HR, we should focus on HRM, especially on the following procedures such as compensation, regulation, hiring etc.
If policies are stable, we should focus on HRD better. That is why Santen Korea hired an HRD Expert.
If you think it is necessary to develop concentrate our resources to HRD, yes, I think regional HRD role is necessary. And with the current situation, he is a top choice.
However, I have 2 concerns about this.
First, some kinds of aspect, this is very sensitive, especially as it is related to his IDP. So I have to discuss this with him and his cooperation and compliance is important.
And the other thing is as I mentioned, SKR needs is clear. It means we have to focus on HRD now.
So if he will take over the role, naturally his work scope and volume will increase. Due to this, I don’t like that it affects SKR’s HRD task. It means, poor performance and delays in SKR HRD. SKR management also wouldn’t like these kinds of situation.


First of all, thank you for your proposal. For me, I think it is good career opportunity.
The concern is, as you know, I am not native speaker. So even though I have good experiences and knowledge about HR, it is difficult to refer it fully to our coworkers, regional member.
And Santen Korea is the biggest company and has a lot of task to sustain its growth.
I already shared my task for this year and besides those, there are a lot of operational work in Korea. So time and resources is not enough.


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