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Save Health, Save My Dream

Hello! everyone.
I'm Jung Yoo Jin, in class 2 at grade 1.
I connect a topic to my future dream. I want to be a nutritionist. A nutritionis should know food safety & infection as well as nutritious foods.

A good food makes a healthy body. We eat all kinds of food everyday. There are good germs in a healthy food. We have Kimch and Soybean paste. These foods have good germs. Good germs play an important role in your body. They protect your body from the virus.

In other hand there are bad germs. If a bad germ in food, it attacks your body.It makes stomache and vomit.It can makes skin-trouble.

Now we are in terrible virus- covid 19- danger. A virus infection can be occured by food contact. It can cause people to have fever and headache or even die !


We can not see germs and virus. We can save ourselves by controling sanitary and cleanness.

I'd like to be a nutritionist. I will study not only food nutrition but also food safety.
I want....me, my family, my neighbor and the world not to be sick.
May you always be happy and healthy.
Thank you for listening.

Hello everyone!
I'm Jung Yoo Jin from the Class 2 of 1st grade. Today, I would like to share my future dream. I want to be a nutritionist someday. A nutritionist should know food safety & infection control, as well as, the varieties of nutritious foods.

A good food makes our body healthy. We eat different kinds of food every day. Did you know that there are good bacteria in some food we eat? Yes, some good examples are kimchi, yogurt drink and soybean paste. These food are good source of good bacteria. Good bacteria plays an important role in our body. They protect our body from the viruses.

On the other hand, there are harmful bacteria as well. That's why we have always wash our hands to avoid it. If a bad bacteria goes it our food, it will attack our body. It might cause stomachache and vomitting. It can also cause skin allergies.

We are facing a terrible pandemic now which is COVID-19. This virus can be transferred by food contamination and physical contact with a confirmed carrier. The symptoms are quite normal such as fever, headache, nausea and we might even die.

We can not see germs and viruses around us. We can save ourselves by maintaining sanitation and cleanliness in our surroundings.

I'd like to be a nutritionist. I will not only study about food nutritions but also hwo to handle food safety.
I want------ my family, my neighbors, my fellow classmates and I, as well as, the citizens around the world to be safe and healthy.
May you always be happy and strong!
Thank you for listening.


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Goodluck, Yoo Jin ^^


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