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Hello!
Below is some part of my coverletter that I use everytime I apply for the job.
I'll be very appreciated if it's review. Thanks in advance!

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I am very pleased to tell you my story to be a cabin crew following by boarding procedures.

Step 1; Preparation
What have I done to become a cabin crew so far? To answer this question, I could introduce myself that I have lots of international experiences and enjoy learning different culture.
I have lived in China for 11 months and Ireland for 9 months to study their language and culture. Additionally, I have traveled 14 countries including Europe and Asia.
When I studied English in Dublin, I went on a trip to Galway with my schoolmates including French, Spanish and Brazilian. From renting a car to planning an itinerary, we put our heads together so that everyone enjoyed our trip. I also worked as a waitress in Korean BBQ restaurant for 5months. Through these experiences, I could learn how to interact with various people and understand each other better than before.
If I work for Lufthansa as a cabin crew, communication skills with passengers and team members will be required. My global experiences developed me an open-minded and adaptable individual. So I can assure you that I am qualified to be a international team member of Lufthansa.

Hello!
Below is some part of my coverletter that I use everytime I apply for the job.
I'll be very appreciated if it's review. Thanks in advance!

----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
I am very pleased to tell you my story to be a cabin crew following by boarding procedures.

Step 1; Preparation
What have I done to become a cabin crew so far? To answer this question, I could introduce myself that I have lots of international experiences and enjoy learning different culture.
I have lived in China for 11 months and Ireland for 9 months to study their language and culture. Additionally, I have traveled 14 countries including Europe and Asia.
When I studied English in Dublin, I went on a trip to Galway with my schoolmates including French, Spanish and Brazilian. From renting a car to planning an itinerary, we put our heads together so that everyone enjoyed our trip. I also worked as a waitress in Korean BBQ restaurant for 5months. Through these experiences, I could learn how to interact with various people and understand each other better than before.
If I work for Lufthansa as a cabin crew, communication skills with passengers and team members will be required. My global experiences developed me an open-minded and adaptable individual. So I can assure you that I am qualified to be a international team member of Lufthansa.

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Hello!
Below is some
a part of my coverletter that I use everytime I apply for the a job.
I'll be very
really appreciated it if it's for a review. Thanks in advance!

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I am very pleased to tell you my story
experiences to be a cabin crew with the following by boarding procedures.

Step 1: Preparation
What have I done to become a cabin crew so far?

 

To answer this question, I could introduce myself say that I have lots of international experiences and enjoy learning different cultures.
I have lived in China for 11 months and
in Ireland for 9 months to study their language and culture. Additionally, I have traveled 14 countries including in Europe and Asia. 
When I studied English in Dublin, I went on a trip to Galway with my schoolmates including French, Spanish and Brazilian
schoolmates. From renting We rented a car to planning an our itinerary. We put our heads together so that everyone enjoyed our trip. I also worked as a waitress in a Korean BBQ restaurant for 5 months. Through, these experiences, I could learn am already confident on how to interact with various people and understand each other better than before. 
If I work for Lufthansa as a cabin crew, communication skills with
the passengers and the team members will be required. My global experiences developed me to be an open-minded and adaptable individual. So, I can assure you that I am qualified to be a part of your international team, as a member of this airline Lufthansa.

 

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