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When I get a stress, I have many solutions.
First of all, Just I get a sleep about 1~2hours.
After I get up , I feel relaxing even better.
Second of all, I eat some chocolate. It is temporary effect to me.
third, I eat bubble tea. This is very effective for me.
I guess that I visit this cafe for once or twice a week.
To be frankly I think that I will go starbucks better than this cafe.
It called Amasbin. I went to Busan with my friends , I tatsed it. It was so~ good.
I couldn’t forget this brand. I always missed it.

But recently it(cafe) was opened near my home by walk 5 minutes.
When I get many stress, I always exercise and take a shower in the gym.
As soon as finished, I will go there.Always I eat one menu. It called strawberry smooth bubble tea. It added bubble more 3~4 times
I often go there, Cafe owner know me. we ask each other.
These days Because of corono virus, I limit to go outside, but I will wear the mask and go this cafe.

When I get a stress, I have many solutions.
First of all, Just I get a sleep about 1~2hours.
After I get up , I feel relaxing even better.
Second of all, I eat some chocolate. It is temporary effect to me.
third, I eat bubble tea. This is very effective for me.
I guess that I visit this cafe for once or twice a week.
To be frankly I think that I will go starbucks better than this cafe.
It called Amasbin. I went to Busan with my friends , I tatsed it. It was so~ good.
I couldn’t forget this brand. I always missed it.

But recently it(cafe) was opened near my home by walk 5 minutes.
When I get many stress, I always exercise and take a shower in the gym.
As soon as finished, I will go there.Always I eat one menu. It called strawberry smooth bubble tea. It added bubble more 3~4 times
I often go there, Cafe owner know me. we ask each other.
These days Because of corono virus, I limit to go outside, but I will wear the mask and go this cafe.

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When I get stressed, I have many solutions. First of all, When I get to sleep for about 1~2 hours then when I get up, I feel relaxed even better. Second, I eat some chocolate but it's just a temporary effect to me. Third, I drink bubble tea. This is very effective for me. I guess that I visit this cafe once or twice a week. To be frank I think that I wouldn't go to Starbucks instead of this cafe called Amasbin. 

I went to Busan with my friends, I tasted it there and it was so good. I couldn’t forget this brand. I always missed it. Recently the cafe opened a branch near my home and I can walk for 5 minutes only to get there. When I get much stress, I always exercise and take a shower in the gym. As soon as I finished, I will go there and order the same menu. It's called strawberry smooth bubble tea. It added bubble more 3~4 times. 

I often go there so the cafe owner knows me already and we talked to each other. These past few days  I limit to go outside because of the coronavirus. But I will wear a mask and still go to this cafe.


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