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Bye.. baby guppies

l love animals. But l don’t like to bring up pets. Because someday, we have to say goodbye.
My parrot l’m raising now was brought by my dad without consulting anyone, so I unwillingly started taking care of it out of responsibility. But now, l love my cute parrot!
Sometimes I feel sad when I think about my parrot dying.
l bring up guppies because of my mom favorite pet. This is ironic situation. My mom only likes to see fish tank. haha

We can see many people like me, who begin taking care of pet s out of responsibility because of someone else. And over time, they grow attached to them.

l’ll try 10 minutes a day to teach my parrot to say hello. haha
See you after the holiday!
Have a good weekend~

l love animals. But l don’t like to bring up pets. Because someday, we have to say goodbye.
My parrot l’m raising now was brought by my dad without consulting anyone, so I unwillingly started taking care of it out of responsibility. But now, l love my cute parrot!
Sometimes I feel sad when I think about my parrot dying.
l bring up guppies because of my mom favorite pet. This is ironic situation. My mom only likes to see fish tank. haha

We can see many people like me, who begin taking care of pet s out of responsibility because of someone else. And over time, they grow attached to them.

l’ll try 10 minutes a day to teach my parrot to say hello. haha
See you after the holiday!
Have a good weekend~

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Corrected version:
I love animals, but I don’t like raising pets because someday we have to say goodbye.
My parrot, which I’m raising now, was brought home by my dad without asking anyone, so I unwillingly started taking care of it out of responsibility. But now, I love my cute parrot!
Sometimes I feel sad when I think about my parrot dying.
I raise guppies because they are my mom’s favorite pet. It’s ironic because my mom only likes to look at the fish tank. haha
Many people are like me. They start taking care of pets out of responsibility for someone else, but over time, they grow attached.
I’ll try to spend 10 minutes a day teaching my parrot to say hello. haha
See you after the holiday! Have a good weekend~

Explanations:

 

  • “bring up pets” → “raise pets” (more natural).

  • “was brought by my dad” → “was brought home by my dad” (clearer).

  • “mom favorite pet” → “my mom’s favorite pet” (needs possessive).

  • “ironic situation” → “It’s ironic” (natural phrasing).

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REPLY:

Hi Hyang, thank you for sharing your story about your pets. I can really feel how much you care for your parrot, even though at first you didn’t plan to raise it. It’s touching that your responsibility turned into love. I understand your feelings about saying goodbye one day, it shows your heart is very kind. Your parrot is lucky to have you. Teaching it to say hello sounds so fun! I hope you and your pets bring each other happiness. Have a wonderful holiday and weekend!

 


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