Golden holiday

In Korea, we call long holiday a golden holiday!
My dad loves golden holiday. haha

When a kid, Chuseok just felt exciting but now it is a little tiring.
(It’s sometimes give me a hard time.)
On my dad’s side, we used to be busy from Chuseok before because of the memorial rites preparing. These day we don’t follow that tradition anymore. My grandfather compromised by having a meal together. Here, for the women, the key point is eating out instead of cooking!
l’m close with maternal relatives, so it’s always fun when we get together. (except for the part that takes 4 hours by car..)

It was harder than l expected to talk about holiday, but I realized my weak points. Fortunately, tomorrow isn’t the beginning of the holiday. See you tomorrow ~

In Korea, we call long holiday a golden holiday!
My dad loves golden holiday. haha

When a kid, Chuseok just felt exciting but now it is a little tiring.
(It’s sometimes give me a hard time.)
On my dad’s side, we used to be busy from Chuseok before because of the memorial rites preparing. These day we don’t follow that tradition anymore. My grandfather compromised by having a meal together. Here, for the women, the key point is eating out instead of cooking!
l’m close with maternal relatives, so it’s always fun when we get together. (except for the part that takes 4 hours by car..)

It was harder than l expected to talk about holiday, but I realized my weak points. Fortunately, tomorrow isn’t the beginning of the holiday. See you tomorrow ~

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Here’s a brief explanation of the mistakes and how I fixed them:

 

1. "When a kid, Chuseok just felt exciting" → should be "When I was a kid, Chuseok felt exciting".

   • Missing subject "I" and wrong tense.

2. "(It’s sometimes give me a hard time.)" → should be "Sometimes it gives me a hard time."

   • Wrong verb form “give” → “gives.”

3. "These day we don’t follow" → should be "These days we don’t follow."

   • Plural form “days.”

4. "My grandfather compromised by having a meal together."

   • Sounds unnatural. Changed to "My grandfather made a compromise by just having a meal together."

5. "the key point is eating out instead of cooking!" → better as "the best part is eating out instead of cooking!"

   • "Key point" is unnatural here.

6. "(except for the part that takes 4 hours by car..)" → smoother as "except for the part where it takes 4 hours by car."

7. "tomorrow isn’t the beginning of the holiday" → more natural as "tomorrow isn’t the start of the holiday yet."

 

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