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This time in my sewing class, I completed two pieces of the legs part. I tried to concentrate when using a sewing machine because I didn't want to make a mistake. So I attached the pieces with many pins and started the lockstitch very slowly and carefully. My mom also brought her clothes, which needed to be mended. You're able to use their sewing machines and tools for two hours - it is 10,000 won.

This time in my sewing class, I completed two pieces of the legs part. I tried to concentrate when using a sewing machine because I didn't want to make a mistake. So I attached the pieces with many pins and started the lockstitch very slowly and carefully. My mom also brought her clothes, which needed to be mended. You're able to use their sewing machines and tools for two hours - it is 10,000 won. ======================================================================================================================================================================

Here are the corrections:

1. Original:
   This time in my sewing class, I completed two pieces of the legs part.
   Corrected:
   This time in my sewing class, I completed two pieces for the leg part.
   Explanation:
   "Of the legs part" sounds awkward. We say "for the leg part" when talking about parts of clothing.

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2. Original:
   I tried to concentrate when using a sewing machine because I didn't want to make a mistake.
   Corrected:
   ✅ No correction needed!
   Explanation:
   This sentence is clear and correct! Nice job.

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3. Original:
   So I attached the pieces with many pins and started the lockstitch very slowly and carefully.
   Corrected:
   ✅ No correction needed!
   Explanation:
   This sentence is also correct and well-written. Well done!

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4. Original:
   My mom also brought her clothes, which needed to be mended.
   Corrected:
   ✅ No correction needed!
   Explanation:
   Perfect! "Mended" is a great word choice here.

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5. Original:
   You're able to use their sewing machines and tools for two hours - it is 10,000 won.
   Corrected:
   You can use their sewing machines and tools for two hours—it's 10,000 won.
   Explanation:

   • "You’re able to" is okay, but "You can" sounds more natural in everyday English.

   • "It is 10,000 won" is better as "it's 10,000 won" (use a contraction).

   • A dash (—) is used better here to connect the two ideas smoothly.

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Final Edited Version

This time in my sewing class, I completed two pieces for the leg part. I tried to concentrate when using a sewing machine because I didn't want to make a mistake. So I attached the pieces with many pins and started the lockstitch very slowly and carefully. My mom also brought her clothes, which needed to be mended. You can use their sewing machines and tools for two hours - it's 10,000 won.