Lastly,some people think that it is good to spend the money right now because it gives us happiness but I don't think that's really true.Surely,we will be happy if we spend the money now but we won't be happy in the future because we might not have any money to live.
Corrected version:
I think people should save money for the future. Firstly, if we save money, we can use it in emergency situations. For example, when we are sick, we can use our saved money. Secondly, we can earn more money if we save it. For example, if we save money in our account, we can earn interest. Lastly, some people think it is good to spend money now because it gives us happiness, but I don’t think that’s really true. Surely, we will be happy if we spend money now, but we won’t be happy in the future because we might not have any money to live.
Mistakes and explanations:
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"if we save money, we can use that" → "we can use it": Use “it” instead of “that” for correct pronoun.
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"for our emergency situations" → "in emergency situations": “In emergency situations” is simpler and more natural.
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"earn interests" → "earn interest": “Interest” is usually uncountable here.
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"spend the money right now" → "spend money now": No need for “the” here.
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"that's really true" → "that’s really true": Minor grammar fix; “that’s” is the correct contraction.
