Last week, I got to finish my fencing match and exam well. A few days later, I met my cousin and spent good times. First we headed to a board game caf? and played games: Halli Galli, Rummikub, Uno, Jenga, Beware of the Dog, and Da Vinci Code. The Da Vinci Code was the most exciting game I have ever played. Then we went to a PlayStation caf? because we can't just say goodbye like this. I felt It was been so long since I saw him. So we enjoyed another hour playing Super Mario on Nintendo Switch.
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Here are the corrections:
Original:
Last week, I got to finish my fencing match and exam well.
Corrected: Last week, I finished my fencing match and exam successfully.
Why? “Got to finish” is a bit awkward here. We say “finished successfully” when we want to say something ended well.
Original:
A few days later, I met my cousin and spent good times.
Corrected: A few days later, I met my cousin and had a good time.
Why? “Spent good times” is not natural. We usually say “had a good time” when we enjoy something.
Original:
First we headed to a board game caf? and played games: Halli Galli, Rummikub, Uno, Jenga, Beware of the Dog, and Da Vinci Code.
Corrected: First, we went to a board game café and played games like Halli Galli, Rummikub, Uno, Jenga, Beware of the Dog, and Da Vinci Code.
Why? “Headed to” is okay, but “went to” is simpler. Also, the accent in “café” was missing (you had a “?”). Adding a comma after “First” also helps the sentence flow better.
Original:
The Da Vinci Code was the most exciting game I have ever played.
Corrected: ✅ The Da Vinci Code was the most exciting game I have ever played.
Why? This sentence is already perfect!
Original:
Then we went to a PlayStation caf? because we can't just say goodbye like this.
Corrected: Then we went to a PlayStation café because we couldn’t just say goodbye like that.
Why? Again, fix the “?” to “é” in café. Change “can’t” to “couldn’t” to match the past tense.
Original:
I felt It was been so long since I saw him.
Corrected: I felt like it had been so long since I had seen him.
Why? “It was been” is incorrect. Use “had been” and past perfect “had seen” for things that happened before another past event.
Original:
So we enjoyed another hour playing Super Mario on Nintendo Switch.
Corrected: ✅ So we enjoyed another hour playing Super Mario on the Nintendo Switch.
Why? Add “the” before “Nintendo Switch” to make it sound more natural.
Final Edited Text:
Last week, I finished my fencing match and exam successfully. A few days later, I met my cousin and had a good time. First, we went to a board game café and played games like Halli Galli, Rummikub, Uno, Jenga, Beware of the Dog, and Da Vinci Code. The Da Vinci Code was the most exciting game I have ever played. Then we went to a PlayStation café because we couldn’t just say goodbye like that. I felt like it had been so long since I had seen him. So we enjoyed another hour playing Super Mario on the Nintendo Switch.
