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Deserted Island

If I went to the deserted island.
I would like to bring an ax, a lighter and sleeping bag.
An knife is necessary.
It could protect me and cutting.
I would need to a lighter to stay warm and to cook.
Last is sleeping bag. Because I can’t sleep at ground. But frankly speaking, I don’t want to go there.

TITLE: Deserted Island

CONTENTS:
If I went to a deserted island,
I would like to bring an axe, a lighter, and a sleeping bag.
A knife is necessary.
It could protect me and help me cut things.
I would need a lighter to stay warm and cook food.
Last is the sleeping bag, because I can’t sleep on the ground.
But frankly speaking, I don’t want to go there.


EXPLANATION:
1.❌: If I went to the deserted island.
   ✅: If I went to a deserted island,

Why?
  • Use “a” instead of “the” — we are not talking about a specific island.
  • Remove the period and use a comma because the sentence continues.

2. ❌: I would like to bring an ax, a lighter and sleeping bag.
    ✅: I would like to bring an ax, a lighter, and a sleeping bag.

Why?
  • Add “a” before “sleeping bag.”
  • Add a comma before “and” in a list.

3. ❌: An knife is necessary.
    ✅: A knife is necessary.

Why?
  • Use “a” not “an” before “knife” — because “knife” starts with a consonant sound (/n/).

4. ❌: It could protect me and cutting.
    ✅: It could protect me and help me cut things.

Why?
  • You need a verb after “and” — say “help me cut,” not just “cutting.”
  • Add “things” to complete the meaning and make the sentence clearer.

5. ❌: I would need to a lighter to stay warm and to cook.
    ✅: I would need a lighter to stay warm and cook food.

Why?
  • Remove “to” before “a lighter” — it’s not needed.
  • Say “cook food” for a complete idea (not just “cook”).

6. ❌: Last is sleeping bag. Because I can’t sleep at ground.
    ✅: Last is the sleeping bag, because I can’t sleep on the ground.

Why?
  • Add “the” before “sleeping bag.”
  • Don’t start with “Because” — connect it with the previous sentence.
  • Say “on the ground” not “at ground.”

 


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