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I want to visit Tanzania

I would like to go to Tanzania.
I am interested in the Tanzania’s national park.
At national park there is sapary (not a zoo).
There are wild animals. For example lions, rhino and elephant.
At sapary, If you are lucky you can see lots of cow and lions are hunting.
I want to see the lions are hunting.
Because I think that was special.
I want to go to Tanzania.

TITLE: I want to visit Tanzania.

CONTENTS:
I would like to go to Tanzania.
I am interested in Tanzania’s national parks.
In the national parks, there are safaris (not zoos).
There are wild animals, for example: lions, rhinos, and elephants.
On a safari, if you are lucky, you can see many cows and lions hunting.
I want to see lions hunting.
I think that is special.
I want to go to Tanzania.


EXPLANATION:
1. ❌: I am interested in the Tanzania’s national park.
    ✅: I am interested in Tanzania’s national parks.

Why?
  • Remove “the” before “Tanzania’s” — it’s not needed.
  • Use “parks” (plural), because there is more than one.

2. ❌: At national park there is sapary (not a zoo).
    ✅: In the national parks, there are safaris (not zoos).

Why?
  • Use “In” instead of “At” when talking about locations inside places.
  • Say “safaris,” not “sapary” — spelling is important.
  • Use plural “parks” and “safaris” to match.
  • Use “are” instead of “is” for plural.

3. ❌: There are wild animals. For example lions, rhino and elephant.
    ✅: There are wild animals, for example: lions, rhinos, and elephants.

Why?
  • Add a colon (:) after “for example” to introduce a list.
  • Use plural forms: “lions,” “rhinos,” “elephants.”
  • Use commas to separate the animals.

4. ❌: At sapary, If you are lucky you can see lots of cow and lions are hunting.
    ✅: On a safari, if you are lucky, you can see many cows and lions hunting.

Why?
  • Say “On a safari,” not “At sapary.”
  • Fix spelling: “sapary” → “safari.”
  • Use “many” with animals (not “lots of” in formal writing).
  • Use “cows” (plural), not “cow.”
  • Don’t say “lions are hunting” after “see.” Say “lions hunting.”

5. ❌: I want to see the lions are hunting.
    ✅: I want to see lions hunting.

Why?
  • After verbs like “see,” don’t use “are.” Just say “see lions hunting.”

6. ❌: Because I think that was special.
    ✅: I think that is special.

Why?
  • Don’t start a sentence with “Because” unless it follows another sentence.
  • Use present tense “is,” not past tense “was,” because you're talking about now.

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