Our printer broke down recently. So my mom purchased a new printer to print my exam ticket and many handouts. But it wasn't working. After several attempts, she finally made a phone call to the seller. She seemed upset. By the way, I'm nervous because I'll have a fencing match and an exam two days in a row next week. I hope everything works out well.
Here are the corrections:
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Original: Our printer broke down recently.
Corrected: ✅ Our printer broke down recently.
Explanation: This sentence is already correct. -
Original: So my mom purchased a new printer to print my exam ticket and many handouts.
Corrected: ✅ So my mom bought a new printer to print my exam ticket and many handouts.
Explanation: "Purchased" is correct, but "bought" is a simpler and more natural word for daily conversation. -
Original: But it wasn't working.
Corrected: ✅ But it didn’t work.
Explanation: "Wasn't working" is okay, but "didn’t work" is more appropriate for a specific result after trying to use it. -
Original: After several attempts, she finally made a phone call to the seller.
Corrected: ✅ After several attempts, she finally called the seller.
Explanation: "Made a phone call to" is correct but wordy. "Called" is simpler and clearer. -
Original: She seemed upset.
Corrected: ✅ She seemed upset.
Explanation: This sentence is correct. -
Original: By the way, I'm nervous because I'll have a fencing match and an exam two days in a row next week.
Corrected: ✅ By the way, I'm nervous because I have a fencing match and an exam two days in a row next week.
Explanation: "Will have" is okay, but "have" sounds more natural when talking about scheduled events. -
Original: I hope everything works out well.
Corrected: ✅ I hope everything works out well.
Explanation: This sentence is correct.
Final Edited Version
Our printer broke down recently. So my mom bought a new printer to print my exam ticket and many handouts. But it didn’t work. After several attempts, she finally called the seller. She seemed upset. By the way, I'm nervous because I have a fencing match and an exam two days in a row next week. I hope everything works out well.
