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My mom and I went to one of our go-to restaurants for lunch. She ordered cold arrowroot noodles, and I asked for a noodle soup with Manila clams, as always. We told jumbo steamed meat dumplings as well. They served barley bibimbap to each person as a complimentary dish. Everything was tasty, so we could eat our fill. After eating out, I took a shower because I felt warm. And then, I stood in front of the air conditioner for a few minutes before my English class because I wanted to cool off.

My mom and I went to one of our go-to restaurants for lunch. She ordered cold arrowroot noodles, and I asked for a noodle soup with Manila clams, as always. We told jumbo steamed meat dumplings as well. They served barley bibimbap to each person as a complimentary dish. Everything was tasty, so we could eat our fill. After eating out, I took a shower because I felt warm. And then, I stood in front of the air conditioner for a few minutes before my English class because I wanted to cool off.

Here are the corrections:


  1. Original:
    We told jumbo steamed meat dumplings as well.
    Corrected:
    We also ordered jumbo steamed meat dumplings.
    Explanation:
    The verb “told” is incorrect. We use “order” when asking for food at a restaurant. “Also” fits better here to show it's an additional item.


  1. Original:
    Everything was tasty, so we could eat our fill.
    Corrected:
    Everything was tasty, so we ate our fill.
    Explanation:
    “Could eat” means "had the ability," but here you want to express that you did eat a lot, so the simple past “ate” is better.


  1. Original:
    After eating out, I took a shower because I felt warm.
    Corrected:
    ✅ This sentence is grammatically fine and natural.
    Explanation:
    No correction needed.


  1. Original:
    And then, I stood in front of the air conditioner for a few minutes before my English class because I wanted to cool off.
    Corrected:
    Then I stood in front of the air conditioner for a few minutes before my English class because I wanted to cool off.
    Explanation:
    Starting a sentence with “And then” is often informal or redundant. Simply starting with “Then” is cleaner and more natural in writing.


Final Edited Text

My mom and I went to one of our go-to restaurants for lunch. She ordered cold arrowroot noodles, and I asked for a noodle soup with Manila clams, as always. We also ordered jumbo steamed meat dumplings. They served barley bibimbap to each person as a complimentary dish. Everything was tasty, so we ate our fill. After eating out, I took a shower because I felt warm. Then I stood in front of the air conditioner for a few minutes before my English class because I wanted to cool off.


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