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Should students choose college majors based on their academy interests?

I think students should choose their college majors based on other factors and here's why. Firstly we can't live well without getting high paid jobs. For example,if I like art and I become an artist, I will not live well because it is not paid well. Secondly, having an interest in a subject and doing a great job in a subject is different. For example,liking PE and doing PE well is different.

I think students should choose their college majors based on other factors and here's why. Firstly we can't live well without getting high paid jobs. For example,if I like art and I become an artist, I will not live well because it is not paid well. Secondly, having an interest in a subject and doing a great job in a subject is different. For example,liking PE and doing PE well is different.

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CORRECTION:

I think students should choose their college majors based on other factors, and here's why. Firstly, we can't live well without getting high-paying jobs. For example, if I like art and become an artist, I might not live well because it is not paid well. Secondly, having an interest in a subject and doing well in a subject are different. For example, liking PE and doing well in PE are different. Lastly, some people think that people will not be happy when they do jobs they are good at, but that's not true. If they do a subject well, others will appreciate them, so anyone would be happy. Is there anyone who hates being appreciated by others? Because of these reasons, I think students should choose their majors based on other factors.


Simple explanations of the corrections:

 

  1. "high paid" → "high-paying"
    → Use the correct adjective form.

  2. Missing space after commas ("example,if")
    → Always put a space after a comma.

  3. "live well" → "might not live well"
    → Use "might" for possibility and to sound more natural.

  4. "doing a great job in a subject is different" → "doing well in a subject is different"
    → "Doing well" is more natural and commonly used.

  5. "doing PE well is different" → "doing well in PE is different"
    → "Do well in [subject]" is the correct phrase.

  6. "others will appreciate him or her" → "others will appreciate them"
    → "Them" is a more natural and gender-neutral pronoun here.

  7. "Will there be anyone who hates..." → "Is there anyone who hates..."
    → "Is there" is more natural in a rhetorical question.

 


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