last sataurday we held on my son's birthday party with his friends, many friends came home than I expected. I thought the boy who an upper grade in elementary might eaten more so I ordered delivery pizza and chicken and so on. But I seemed that they could't see some food. they was having fun with game so they didn't even eat more. leftover was on my dinner. they played game with the phone during a lot of time. I allow him especially for his party. It was scorching so they continued eating, playing game, whatching move in all afternoon. I was fine if my son was happy.
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Here are the corrections:
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Original: last sataurday we held on my son's birthday party with his friends,
✅ Corrected: Last Saturday, we held my son's birthday party with his friends.
Explanation: Capitalize “Last Saturday”; “held on” is incorrect—just use “held” with “party”. -
Original: many friends came home than I expected.
✅ Corrected: More friends came over than I expected.
Explanation: “More friends” is the correct comparative form; “came home” should be “came over”. -
Original: I thought the boy who an upper grade in elementary might eaten more
✅ Corrected: I thought the older boys from upper elementary grades would eat more.
Explanation: Use “older boys” for clarity; “might eaten” is incorrect—use “would eat”. -
Original: so I ordered delivery pizza and chicken and so on.
✅ Corrected: So, I ordered delivery pizza, chicken, and more.
Explanation: “And so on” is vague—“and more” sounds more natural. -
Original: But I seemed that they could't see some food.
✅ Corrected: But it seemed like they didn’t even notice the food.
Explanation: “I seemed” → “It seemed”; “couldn’t see” → “didn’t notice” for natural phrasing. -
Original: they was having fun with game so they didn't even eat more.
✅ Corrected: They were having fun with games, so they didn’t eat much.
Explanation: “they was” → “they were”; “game” → “games”; “eat more” → “eat much”. -
Original: leftover was on my dinner.
✅ Corrected: I ate the leftovers for dinner.
Explanation: Clear sentence structure with subject-verb-object order. -
Original: they played game with the phone during a lot of time.
✅ Corrected: They played games on their phones for a long time.
Explanation: “game” → “games”; “with the phone” → “on their phones”; “during a lot of time” → “for a long time”. -
Original: I allow him especially for his party.
✅ Corrected: I allowed him, especially because it was his party.
Explanation: Verb tense correction (allow → allowed); added clarity. -
Original: It was scorching so they continued eating, playing game, whatching move in all afternoon.
✅ Corrected: It was scorching, so they stayed inside eating, playing games, and watching a movie all afternoon.
Explanation: Verb corrections (“game” → “games”, “whatching move” → “watching a movie”); improved flow. -
Original: I was fine if my son was happy.
✅ Corrected: I didn’t mind, as long as my son was happy.
Explanation: More natural and idiomatic phrasing.
Final Edited Text:
Last Saturday, we held my son's birthday party with his friends. More friends came over than I expected. I thought the older boys from upper elementary grades would eat more, so I ordered delivery pizza, chicken, and more. But it seemed like they didn’t even notice the food. They were having fun with games, so they didn’t eat much. I ate the leftovers for dinner. They played games on their phones for a long time. I allowed him, especially because it was his party. It was scorching, so they stayed inside eating, playing games, and watching a movie all afternoon. I didn’t mind, as long as my son was happy.
