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I took a fencing trial class yesterday. There was only me as a student. It was fun, but the sword was heavy. I was confused because all terms were French. After the experience, I decided to have my fencing class every Monday starting next week. Maybe it would be the beginner classes, and I would be training one-on-one with my coach in the meantime. I was excited I could fence, what I wanted to do.

I took a fencing trial class yesterday. There was only me as a student. It was fun, but the sword was heavy. I was confused because all terms were French. After the experience, I decided to have my fencing class every Monday starting next week. Maybe it would be the beginner classes, and I would be training one-on-one with my coach in the meantime. I was excited I could fence, what I wanted to do.
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✅ Here are the corrections :

  1. Original: I took a fencing trial class yesterday.
    Corrected: I took a fencing trial class yesterday. ✅
    Explanation: This sentence is already correct.

  2. Original: There was only me as a student.
    Corrected: I was the only student.
    Explanation: “Only me” is incorrect in structure. "I was the only student" is more natural and grammatically correct.

  3. Original: It was fun, but the sword was heavy.
    Corrected: It was fun, but the sword was heavy. ✅
    Explanation: This is also correct and clear.

  4. Original: I was confused because all terms were French.
    Corrected: I was confused because all the terms were in French.
    Explanation: Add “the” and “in” for correct grammar when referring to specific language terms.

  5. Original: After the experience, I decided to have my fencing class every Monday starting next week.
    Corrected: After the experience, I decided to take fencing classes every Monday starting next week.
    Explanation: “Have my fencing class” → “take fencing classes” is the natural phrasing in English.

  6. Original: Maybe it would be the beginner classes, and I would be training one-on-one with my coach in the meantime.
    Corrected: It will probably be beginner classes, and I’ll be training one-on-one with my coach for now.
    Explanation: Shifted to future tense ("will") for upcoming plans. “In the meantime” was a bit unclear, so “for now” works better here.

  7. Original: I was excited I could fence, what I wanted to do.
    Corrected: I was excited to finally try fencing, something I’ve always wanted to do.
    Explanation: Restructured for clarity and more natural expression.


✅ Final Edited Version:

I took a fencing trial class yesterday. I was the only student. It was fun, but the sword was heavy. I was confused because all the terms were in French. After the experience, I decided to take fencing classes every Monday starting next week. It will probably be beginner classes, and I’ll be training one-on-one with my coach for now. I was excited to finally try fencing, something I’ve always wanted to do.

 

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