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If I had a magic lamp, I would ask the ginie for three wishes.
First, all my family be helthy. Because we can't buy healthy by money.
Second, I wan't a one hundred million won. Because I want to give to my family.
Third, I want a house. Because at garden I want to grow plants and eat them.
If one of these three things came true, I would be very happy.

Magical Lamp
If I had a magic lamp, I would ask the genie for three wishes.
First, I would wish for my whole family to be healthy, because you can’t buy health with money.
Second, I would wish for one hundred million won, so I could give it to my family.
Third, I would wish for a house, because I want to grow plants in the garden and eat them.
If even one of these three wishes came true, I would be very happy.

EXPLANTION:

1. ❌: First, all my family be helthy. Because we can't buy healthy by money.
✅: First, I would wish for my whole family to be healthy, because you can’t buy health with money.

Why?
Add “I would wish” to show it's a wish.
Use “to be healthy” instead of “be healthy” for correct grammar.
Say “health”, not “helthy,” after “buy.”
Connect the second sentence using “because” (don’t start with it alone).

2. ❌: Second, I wan't a one hundred million won. Because I want to give to my family.
✅: Second, I would wish for one hundred million won, so I could give it to my family.

Why?
Use “I would wish for” to match the wish pattern.
Remove “a” before “one hundred million won” (money amounts don’t use “a”).
Use “so I could” to show the reason clearly.

3. ❌: Third, I want a house. Because at garden I want to grow plants and eat them.
✅: Third, I would wish for a house, because I want to grow plants in the garden and eat them.

Why?
Use “I would wish for” for the third wish, like the others.
Say “in the garden,” not “at garden.”
Keep the second sentence part of the first using “because.”

4. ❌: If one of these three things came true, I would be very happy.
✅: If even one of these three wishes came true, I would be very happy.

Why?
Say “wishes” instead of “things” to match the idea.
Add “even” to show how special and happy it would be.

 


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