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We went to Je-Ju island. Because my parents in-laws hoped to seeing a my son. He is olny kid between in on my sides and on my husband side. So all grandma and granpa always want to see him. my sister in -law got marreies but she announced to No kids. as soon as father in- laws got upset, That' why it seems he stiil said me "do you think his younger or Olny one kid is lonely. Anyway in a for a while we were great. It 's first time without ancestor mermorail service, So I feel good more because we stayed just travaling .

We went to Je-Ju island. Because my parents in-laws hoped to seeing a my son. He is olny kid between in on my sides and on my husband side. So all grandma and granpa always want to see him. my sister in -law got marreies but she announced to No kids. as soon as father in- laws got upset, That' why it seems he stiil said me "do you think his younger or Olny one kid is lonely. Anyway in a for a while we were great. It 's first time without ancestor mermorail service, So I feel good more because we stayed just travaling .
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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: We went to Je-Ju island.
    Corrected: We went to Jeju Island.
    Explanation: Correct spelling and capitalization; no hyphen is needed in "Jeju."


  1. Original: Because my parents in-laws hoped to seeing a my son.
    Corrected: We went because my parents-in-law wanted to see my son.
    Explanation:

  • "Parents-in-law" is the correct compound noun.

  • "Hoped to seeing" → incorrect verb form. Use "wanted to see."

  • "a my son" → remove unnecessary "a."


  1. Original: He is olny kid between in on my sides and on my husband side.
    Corrected: He is the only child on both my side and my husband's side.
    Explanation:

  • "Olny" → typo; should be "only."

  • "Kid" → more natural to use "child."

  • "Between in on" → remove all unnecessary prepositions.


  1. Original: So all grandma and granpa always want to see him.
    Corrected: So all the grandparents always want to see him.
    Explanation: Use “grandparents” as a general term; add “the” for proper structure.


  1. Original: my sister in -law got marreies but she announced to No kids.
    Corrected: My sister-in-law got married but said she doesn't want to have kids.
    Explanation:

  • Correct spelling: “married” and “sister-in-law.”

  • "Announced to No kids" is unnatural → better to say “she doesn't want to have kids.”


  1. Original: as soon as father in- laws got upset,
    Corrected: My father-in-law got upset as soon as he heard that.
    Explanation: Fix plural error, word order, and add clarity.


  1. Original: That' why it seems he stiil said me "do you think his younger or Olny one kid is lonely.
    Corrected: That’s why he still says to me, “Do you think being an only child is lonely?”
    Explanation:

  • “Still said me” → should be "still says to me."

  • Clarify quoted sentence and fix grammar/spelling ("stiil," "Olny," etc.).


  1. Original: Anyway in a for a while we were great.
    Corrected: Anyway, we had a great time for a while.
    Explanation: Make the phrase natural and grammatically correct.


  1. Original: It 's first time without ancestor mermorail service, So I feel good more because we stayed just travaling.
    Corrected: It was the first time we didn’t have an ancestral memorial service, so I felt even better because we were just traveling.
    Explanation:

  • Correct spelling of “memorial” and “traveling.”

  • Use past tense (“was,” “felt”) for consistency.


Final Edited Text:

We went to Jeju Island because my parents-in-law wanted to see my son. He is the only child on both my side and my husband's side, so all the grandparents always want to spend time with him. My sister-in-law got married but said she doesn’t want to have kids. My father-in-law got upset as soon as he heard that. That’s why he still says to me, “Do you think being an only child is lonely?”

Anyway, we had a great time. It was the first time we didn’t have an ancestral memorial service, so I felt even better because we were just traveling and relaxing.


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