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Moldives

I went to Molives First,
I ate something. and the next day,
We swam but that was not the main. we went to a restaurant and there was steak ,chicken, frenchfries .....
The main thing is starting. first, we went to the sea, we went inside there and swam with fishes that was soo cool, that the fishes are swimming with me. last day, My mom said, 'lets take some pictures' I thought it will be easy but, it took 1hour. we rode a car saying bye to Moldives. and we came back to home. that was the best vacation I'd had.

I went to Molives First,
I ate something. and the next day,
We swam but that was not the main. we went to a restaurant and there was steak ,chicken, frenchfries .....
The main thing is starting. first, we went to the sea, we went inside there and swam with fishes that was soo cool, that the fishes are swimming with me. last day, My mom said, 'lets take some pictures' I thought it will be easy but, it took 1hour. we rode a car saying bye to Moldives. and we came back to home. that was the best vacation I'd had.

 

I went to the Maldives for a vacation. On the first day, I arrived and enjoyed a light meal. The next day, we went swimming—but that wasn’t the main event of our trip. Later, we visited a restaurant where we had steak, chicken, french fries, and more.

The most memorable part began when we headed to the sea. We swam in the ocean and even experienced the thrill of swimming alongside fish—it was so cool that it almost felt like the fish were swimming with me! On the last day, my mom said, "Let’s take some pictures." I thought it would be simple, but it ended up taking an hour.

Finally, we rode in a car, saying goodbye to the Maldives as we headed home. It was the best vacation I have ever had.



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