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My friend is having a baby.we gathered together for her pragnant,we celebrated for her .Finally good portion of friends are being mom.
I knew how she was trying to having a baby, how she want to it. she used to failed to test tube baby sereval times. After knowing it, I felt happy too.I still got some baby stuff that my son was using, I gave her it and new present for baby. She asked me what to need, how guideline to bring up for baby and so on. During we enjoyed our talking topic, I thought when my son was baby.

My friend is having a baby.we gathered together for her pragnant,we celebrated for her .Finally good portion of friends are being mom.
I knew how she was trying to having a baby, how she want to it. she used to failed to test tube baby sereval times. After knowing it, I felt happy too.I still got some baby stuff that my son was using, I gave her it and new present for baby. She asked me what to need, how guideline to bring up for baby and so on. During we enjoyed our talking topic, I thought when my son was baby.
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1. Original:
My friend is having a baby.we gathered together for her pragnant,we celebrated for her.

Corrected:
My friend is having a baby. We gathered to celebrate her pregnancy.

Explanation:

  • “we gathered together for her pragnant” → "pragnant" is a misspelling of pregnant, and the sentence is awkward. We typically say “celebrate her pregnancy.”

  • “we celebrated for her” → "celebrated her" is more natural in this context.


2. Original:
Finally good portion of friends are being mom.

Corrected:
Finally, a good number of my friends are becoming moms.

Explanation:

  • “good portion” → more natural expression is a good number of.

  • “are being mom” → should be are becoming moms (ongoing change).


3. Original:
I knew how she was trying to having a baby, how she want to it.

Corrected:
I knew how hard she tried to have a baby, and how much she wanted it.

Explanation:

  • “trying to having” → wrong verb form. Correct is tried to have.

  • “she want to it” → needs subject-verb agreement (wanted it), and “to” is unnecessary.


4. Original:
she used to failed to test tube baby sereval times.

Corrected:
She had failed at in-vitro fertilization (IVF) several times.

Explanation:

  • “used to failed” → incorrect tense. Use had failed for past experiences.

  • “test tube baby” is outdated/awkward → use in-vitro fertilization (IVF).

  • “sereval” → typo for several.


5. Original:
After knowing it, I felt happy too.

Corrected:
When I heard the news, I felt happy too.

Explanation:

  • “After knowing it” is unnatural. Use When I heard the news or When I found out.


6. Original:
I still got some baby stuff that my son was using, I gave her it and new present for baby.

Corrected:
I still had some baby items my son used, so I gave them to her along with a new gift for the baby.

Explanation:

  • “got” → past tense not appropriate here. Use had.

  • “her it” → unnatural. Should be gave them to her.

  • “stuff” → better to say items, and add clarity with new gift.


7. Original:
She asked me what to need, how guideline to bring up for baby and so on.

Corrected:
She asked me what she might need and how to raise a baby.

Explanation:

  • “what to need” → correct: what she might need.

  • “how guideline to bring up” → unclear phrasing. Use how to raise a baby.


8. Original:
During we enjoyed our talking topic, I thought when my son was baby.

Corrected:
While we were talking, I thought about the time when my son was a baby.

Explanation:

  • “During we enjoyed” → should be While we were talking.

  • “thought when my son was baby” → needs article “a” and complete structure: thought about the time when...


Final Edited Text

My friend is having a baby. We gathered to celebrate her pregnancy. Finally, a good number of my friends are becoming moms.
I knew how hard she tried to have a baby and how much she wanted it. She had failed at in-vitro fertilization (IVF) several times. When I heard the news, I felt happy too.
I still had some baby items my son used, so I gave them to her along with a new gift for the baby. She asked me what she might need and how to raise a baby. While we were talking, I thought about the time when my son was a baby.


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