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Today I played a game today. And that was RIVALS first time I played I was sooooo good. So ,I thought I'm good at this game like one years later I became a pro after I played better and I won, won, and won. next, I played and I lost and lost. 'That impossible' I said .Then, I saw that I was playing with noobs.[some are so so] I was surprised .Then he started to tease. I was mad, but I was kept losing I was so angry that I almost cried then I saw reporting and I reported him and he got banded for 3days.

Today I played a game today. And that was RIVALS first time I played I was sooooo good. So ,I thought I'm good at this game like one years later I became a pro after I played better and I won, won, and won. next, I played and I lost and lost. 'That impossible' I said .Then, I saw that I was playing with noobs.[some are so so] I was surprised .Then he started to tease. I was mad, but I was kept losing I was so angry that I almost cried then I saw reporting and I reported him and he got banded for 3days.
 

Today, I played a game called RIVALS for the first time, and I was amazing at it! I thought to myself, "Wow, I'm really good at this game." As time passed, I kept playing, improving, and winning—again and again. After a year, I had become a pro.

But then, something changed. I played again, and instead of winning, I kept losing. "That's impossible!" I said in disbelief. Then I realized—I had been playing against beginners. Some were decent, but most were inexperienced. I was shocked.

One player started teasing me. I was frustrated, but no matter how hard I tried, I kept losing. My anger built up to the point where I almost cried. Then I saw the reporting feature, and I reported him. As a result, he was banned for three days.



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