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Basically It' not easy having a time to do it and select place which more convienent for her. She is considering it . After get off work, go to the gym near her company or go to the gym near home. we saw new gym opened right by her home. both are good and bad to useful her time. I think it doesn't enough time for bussinessman or women to your's personal time. if I were her, have a time I would go to bed or just stay at home not to do anyting. Because I know how she is busy and working passionately. I hope she relive stress in her any way.

Basically It' not easy having a time to do it and select place which more convienent for her. She is considering it . After get off work, go to the gym near her company or go to the gym near home. we saw new gym opened right by her home. both are good and bad to useful her time. I think it doesn't enough time for bussinessman or women to your's personal time. if I were her, have a time I would go to bed or just stay at home not to do anyting. Because I know how she is busy and working passionately. I hope she relive stress in her any way.
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1. Original:
Basically It' not easy having a time to do it and select place which more convienent for her.

Corrected:
Basically, it’s not easy to find time to do it or choose a place that is more convenient for her.

Explanation:

  • “It’” → “it’s” (missing “s”).

  • “having a time” → “to find time” (correct phrase).

  • “select place which more convienent” → “choose a place that is more convenient” (fix grammar and spelling).


2. Original:
She is considering it .

Corrected:
She is considering it.

Explanation:

  • Just remove the extra space before the period.


3. Original:
After get off work, go to the gym near her company or go to the gym near home.

Corrected:
After getting off work, she can either go to the gym near her company or the one near her home.

Explanation:

  • “After get off work” → “After getting off work” (use gerund).

  • Sentence needs a subject (“she”) and better phrasing.


4. Original:
we saw new gym opened right by her home.

Corrected:
We saw that a new gym opened right by her home.

Explanation:

  • “we saw new gym opened” → “we saw that a new gym opened” (add article and correct structure).


5. Original:
both are good and bad to useful her time.

Corrected:
Both options have pros and cons in terms of using her time efficiently.

Explanation:

  • “good and bad” → “pros and cons” (more natural).

  • “to useful her time” → “in terms of using her time efficiently” (correct expression and grammar).


6. Original:
I think it doesn't enough time for bussinessman or women to your's personal time.

Corrected:
I think businesspeople don’t have enough personal time.

Explanation:

  • “doesn't enough time” → “don’t have enough time” (correct verb structure).

  • “bussinessman or women” → “businesspeople” (more inclusive and correct spelling).

  • “your’s personal time” → “personal time” (unnecessary possessive).


7. Original:
if I were her, have a time I would go to bed or just stay at home not to do anyting.

Corrected:
If I were her and had the time, I would go to bed or just stay at home and do nothing.

Explanation:

  • Use conditional: “If I were her and had the time…”

  • “not to do anyting” → “and do nothing” (simpler and correct).


8. Original:
Because I know how she is busy and working passionately.

Corrected:
Because I know how busy she is and how passionately she works.

Explanation:

  • Word order: “how busy she is” is correct.

  • “working passionately” → “how passionately she works” (clearer phrasing).


9. Original:
I hope she relive stress in her any way.

Corrected:
I hope she can relieve stress in any way she can.

Explanation:

  • “relive stress” → “relieve stress” (correct verb).

  • “in her any way” → “in any way she can” (fix structure and clarity).


Final Edited Version:

Basically, it’s not easy to find time to do it or choose a place that is more convenient for her. She is considering it. After getting off work, she can either go to the gym near her company or the one near her home. We saw that a new gym opened right by her home. Both options have pros and cons in terms of using her time efficiently. I think businesspeople don’t have enough personal time. If I were her and had the time, I would go to bed or just stay at home and do nothing, because I know how busy she is and how passionately she works. I hope she can relieve stress in any way she can.


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