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Speaking of work out , I reminded of my sister. 1 momths ago she suddnely passed out on the streest. All of us were very big deal. Even though she just got a dizzy and worn out from her busy life. No problems hasn't been found. We thought she need a workout and take a rest. I recommended to her workout. because after do that I gained body good conditions and relives stressted too. Her's home and her company are queit so far.

Speaking of work out , I reminded of my sister. 1 momths ago she suddnely passed out on the streest. All of us were very big deal. Even though she just got a dizzy and worn out from her busy life. No problems hasn't been found. We thought she need a workout and take a rest. I recommended to her workout. because after do that I gained body good conditions and relives stressted too. Her's home and her company are queit so far.
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1. Original:
Speaking of work out , I reminded of my sister.

Corrected:
Speaking of working out, I was reminded of my sister.

Explanation:

  • “work out” should be “working out” (gerund form for the subject).

  • “I reminded” should be “I was reminded” (passive form is needed here).


2. Original:
1 momths ago she suddnely passed out on the streest.

Corrected:
One month ago, she suddenly passed out on the street.

Explanation:

  • “1 momths” → “One month” (fix number format and plural error).

  • “suddnely” → “suddenly” (spelling).

  • “streest” → “street” (spelling).


3. Original:
All of us were very big deal.

Corrected:
It was a big deal for all of us.

Explanation:

  • “All of us were very big deal” is grammatically incorrect. “It was a big deal for all of us” is a more natural and correct phrasing.


4. Original:
Even though she just got a dizzy and worn out from her busy life.

Corrected:
It turned out she just felt dizzy and worn out from her busy life.

Explanation:

  • “got a dizzy” is incorrect; “felt dizzy” is the correct phrase.

  • The sentence also lacks a subject and verb to make it complete.


5. Original:
No problems hasn't been found.

Corrected:
No problems were found.

Explanation:

  • Double negative (“no” and “hasn't”) is incorrect. Use “No problems were found” (past simple passive).


6. Original:
We thought she need a workout and take a rest.

Corrected:
We thought she needed to work out and get some rest.

Explanation:

  • “need” should be in the past tense (“needed”).

  • Parallel structure: “to work out and get some rest.”


7. Original:
I recommended to her workout.

Corrected:
I recommended that she work out.

Explanation:

  • “Recommend” is usually followed by “that + subject + verb” or “recommending doing something.”

  • “To her workout” is incorrect.


8. Original:
because after do that I gained body good conditions and relives stressted too.

Corrected:
Because after doing that, I gained better physical condition and relieved stress too.

Explanation:

  • “after do” → “after doing” (gerund).

  • “body good conditions” → “better physical condition.”

  • “relives stressted” → “relieved stress” (grammar and spelling).


9. Original:
Her's home and her company are queit so far.

Corrected:
Her home and her company have been quiet so far.

Explanation:

  • “Her’s” → “Her” (no apostrophe).

  • “queit” → “quiet” (spelling).

  • Use present perfect (“have been”) to show the situation continuing until now.


Final Edited Version:

Speaking of working out, I was reminded of my sister. One month ago, she suddenly passed out on the street. It was a big deal for all of us. It turned out she just felt dizzy and worn out from her busy life. No problems were found. We thought she needed to work out and get some rest. I recommended that she work out, because after doing that, I gained better physical condition and relieved stress too. Her home and her company have been quiet so far.


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