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HATTIE THE MK(in school)

story:
First, children was playing in the playground then, then saw HATTIE MK she was mean but ,she was only 6years but ,she was bad
first,she took on child's cupcake another was playing handball but, Hattie MK stole the hand ball.That boy was smart he said ,lets go to secret spot. He said, and everyone didnt knew what he was taking about but, they followed him. there was a tree. He said you cant climb up to that tree. but, Hattie MK just ignored him and climbed and the teacher saw that and said, Dont climb up to that tree it is not allowed to not climb the tree and she got scolding

story:
First, children was playing in the playground then, then saw HATTIE MK she was mean but ,she was only 6years but ,she was bad
first,she took on child's cupcake another was playing handball but, Hattie MK stole the hand ball.That boy was smart he said ,lets go to secret spot. He said, and everyone didnt knew what he was taking about but, they followed him. there was a tree. He said you cant climb up to that tree. but, Hattie MK just ignored him and climbed and the teacher saw that and said, Dont climb up to that tree it is not allowed to not climb the tree and she got scolding

 

First, the children were playing in the playground. Then, they saw Hattie MK. She was mean, even though she was only six years old.

First, she took a child's cupcake. Another child was playing handball, but Hattie MK stole the handball. The boy was smart and said, "Let's go to a secret spot." Everyone followed him, even though they didn’t know what he was talking about.

There was a tree. He said, "You can't climb up that tree." But Hattie MK ignored him and climbed up anyway. The teacher saw her and said, "Don't climb that tree! It is not allowed!" Hattie MK got scolded.



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