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Watching at his test I reminded of my childhood. I used to many contest of violin .When I failed to some test, she always never nag and upset, just said cheer up or you've done great at me. She treated me clam or easy. She might have got a nervous and concerned in her mind. But for me kept it herself. The other way I gave a burden to my son and I appeared getting nervous front of him.Before get a test, he said me "if I failed, do you annoyed at me? I thought how many I annoyed at him. I regreted. I realized mom always calim and peaceful to child like my mom.

Watching at his test I reminded of my childhood. I used to many contest of violin .When I failed to some test, she always never nag and upset, just said cheer up or you've done great at me. She treated me clam or easy. She might have got a nervous and concerned in her mind. But for me kept it herself. The other way I gave a burden to my son and I appeared getting nervous front of him.Before get a test, he said me "if I failed, do you annoyed at me? I thought how many I annoyed at him. I regreted. I realized mom always calim and peaceful to child like my mom.
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Here are the corrections:


1.

Original: Watching at his test I reminded of my childhood.
Corrected: Watching his test reminded me of my childhood.
Explanation:

  • “Watching at” → remove “at”; just say “watching.”

  • “I reminded” → should be “reminded me” (passive structure).


2.

Original: I used to many contest of violin.
Corrected: I used to enter many violin contests.
Explanation:

  • "Used to" needs a verb: “enter.”

  • “Contest of violin” → “violin contests” (natural word order).


3.

Original: When I failed to some test, she always never nag and upset, just said cheer up or you've done great at me.
Corrected: When I failed a test, she never nagged or got upset. She just said, “Cheer up,” or “You’ve done great.”
Explanation:

  • “Failed to some test” → “failed a test.”

  • “Always never” is contradictory → just use “never.”

  • Fix past tense verbs: “nag” → “nagged,” “upset” → “got upset.”

  • “At me” is unnecessary.


4.

Original: She treated me clam or easy.
Corrected: She treated me calmly and gently.
Explanation:

  • “Clam” → “calmly” (correct spelling and form).

  • “Easy” should be “gently” for natural expression.


5.

Original: She might have got a nervous and concerned in her mind.
Corrected: She might have felt nervous and concerned inside.
Explanation:

  • “Got a nervous” is incorrect → use “felt nervous.”

  • “In her mind” is okay, but “inside” is more natural here.


6.

Original: But for me kept it herself.
Corrected: But she kept it to herself.
Explanation:

  • Subject “she” is missing.

  • Natural phrase is “kept it to herself.”


7.

Original: The other way I gave a burden to my son and I appeared getting nervous front of him.
Corrected: On the other hand, I put pressure on my son and looked nervous in front of him.
Explanation:

  • “The other way” → “On the other hand.”

  • “Gave a burden” → “put pressure on.”

  • “Appeared getting nervous” → “looked nervous.”

  • “Front of him” → “in front of him.”


8.

Original: Before get a test, he said me "if I failed, do you annoyed at me?"
Corrected: Before the test, he asked me, “If I fail, will you be annoyed at me?”
Explanation:

  • “Before get a test” → “Before the test.”

  • “Said me” → “asked me.”

  • Correct tense: “fail” (not “failed”) with “will.”

  • “Do you annoyed” → “will you be annoyed.”


9.

Original: I thought how many I annoyed at him.
Corrected: I realized how often I had gotten annoyed with him.
Explanation:

  • “How many” → “how often.”

  • “I annoyed at him” → “I had gotten annoyed with him.”


10.

Original: I regreted.
Corrected: I regretted it.
Explanation:

  • Spelling: “regreted” → “regretted.”

  • Add “it” for completeness.


11.

Original: I realized mom always calim and peaceful to child like my mom.
Corrected: I realized a mother should always be calm and peaceful to her child, like my mom was.
Explanation:

  • “Calim” → “calm.”

  • Add “a mother should be…” for clarity.

  • “To child” → “to her child.”



Final Edited Version

Watching his test reminded me of my childhood. I used to enter many violin contests.
When I failed a test, my mom never nagged or got upset. She just said, “Cheer up,” or “You’ve done great.”
She treated me calmly and gently. She might have felt nervous and concerned inside, but she kept it to herself.
On the other hand, I put pressure on my son and looked nervous in front of him.
Before the test, he asked me, “If I fail, will you be annoyed at me?”
I realized how often I had gotten annoyed with him. I regretted it.
I realized that a mother should always be calm and peaceful with her child, just like my mom was.


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