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Today was my son's a swimming level test. He's been learning a swimming every once a week for one years. Fanalliy he took a all of skill by bettefly stroke. If he don't stop it 4 raps it will pass the test. It seemed that he is weak than other boys. So l forced him to learn a swimming.At first he scared of water. He couldn't dig his face in the water. But he was improving his skills. He did it well than I expected. He became a stronger. I prouded of him.

Today was my son's a swimming level test. He's been learning a swimming every once a week for one years. Fanalliy he took a all of skill by bettefly stroke. If he don't stop it 4 raps it will pass the test. It seemed that he is weak than other boys. So l forced him to learn a swimming.At first he scared of water. He couldn't dig his face in the water. But he was improving his skills. He did it well than I expected. He became a stronger. I prouded of him.
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Here are the corrections:


1.

Original: Today was my son's a swimming level test.
Corrected: Today was my son's swimming level test.
Explanation: Remove the extra article "a" after “son’s.” Possessives (my son's) already describe the noun (test).


2.

Original: He's been learning a swimming every once a week for one years.
Corrected: He's been learning swimming once a week for one year.
Explanation:

  • No article needed before uncountable nouns like “swimming.”

  • “Every once a week” → just say “once a week.”

  • “One years” → "year" (singular).


3.

Original: Fanalliy he took a all of skill by bettefly stroke.
Corrected: Finally, he completed all the skills for the butterfly stroke.
Explanation:

  • “Fanalliy” → spelling correction to “Finally.”

  • “Took a all of skill” is incorrect; use “completed all the skills.”

  • Correct spelling: "butterfly stroke."


4.

Original: If he don't stop it 4 raps it will pass the test.
Corrected: If he doesn’t stop during 4 laps, he will pass the test.
Explanation:

  • “Don’t” → “doesn’t” (he = 3rd person singular).

  • “Raps” → “laps” (correct spelling for swimming).

  • Clarify sentence structure for meaning.


5.

Original: It seemed that he is weak than other boys.
Corrected: It seemed that he was weaker than the other boys.
Explanation:

  • “Is” → “was” for past tense consistency.

  • Use “weaker” (comparative form of "weak").


6.

Original: So l forced him to learn a swimming.
Corrected: So I encouraged him to learn swimming.
Explanation:

  • “Forced” sounds too harsh; “encouraged” is more positive.

  • “A swimming” → “swimming” (uncountable noun).


7.

Original: At first he scared of water.
Corrected: At first, he was scared of the water.
Explanation:

  • Add “was” for correct past passive form.

  • “The water” sounds more natural.


8.

Original: He couldn't dig his face in the water.
Corrected: He couldn't put his face in the water.
Explanation:

  • “Dig” is the wrong verb. Use “put” or “dip.”


9.

Original: But he was improving his skills.
Corrected: But he gradually improved his skills.
Explanation:

  • Optional: “was improving” is fine, but "gradually improved" adds clarity and smoothness.


10.

Original: He did it well than I expected.
Corrected: He did better than I expected.
Explanation:

  • “Did better” is the correct comparative phrase.


11.

Original: He became a stronger.
Corrected: He became stronger.
Explanation:

  • “Stronger” is a comparative adjective, not a noun → no “a.”


12.

Original: I prouded of him.
Corrected: I was proud of him.
Explanation:

  • “Prouded” is not a word. Use “was proud.”



Final Edited Version:

Today was my son's swimming level test. He's been learning swimming once a week for one year.
Finally, he completed all the skills for the butterfly stroke. If he doesn’t stop during 4 laps, he will pass the test.
It seemed that he was weaker than the other boys, so I encouraged him to learn swimming.
At first, he was scared of the water. He couldn't put his face in the water. But he gradually improved his skills.
He did better than I expected. He became stronger. I was proud of him.


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