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We went to barcelona for 7days. We were tired to adjust jet lag for 2days.
We had one day one pella and churros which is Spain's food. I couldn't get enough of them.It's very yummy. We used to find must- go restaurant using travel site. There were many attractions and sightseeing spot. Even if we took a picture thoughtlessly, the picture came out amazing.we booked gaudi group tour. It was easy to understand about history and hidden story Gaudie's architectural from guide. It was wonderful trip.

We went to barcelona for 7days. We were tired to adjust jet lag for 2days.
We had one day one pella and churros which is Spain's food. I couldn't get enough of them.It's very yummy. We used to find must- go restaurant using travel site. There were many attractions and sightseeing spot. Even if we took a picture thoughtlessly, the picture came out amazing.we booked gaudi group tour. It was easy to understand about history and hidden story Gaudie's architectural from guide. It was wonderful trip.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: We went to barcelona for 7days.
    Corrected: We went to Barcelona for 7 days.
    Explanation: Proper nouns like "Barcelona" should be capitalized. Add a space between "7" and "days."

  2. Original: We were tired to adjust jet lag for 2days.
    Corrected: We were tired from adjusting to the jet lag for 2 days.
    Explanation: "Tired from adjusting" is the correct expression. Use "adjusting to" and add a space between "2" and "days."

  3. Original: We had one day one pella and churros which is Spain's food.
    Corrected: We had paella and churros every day, which are traditional Spanish foods.
    Explanation: Likely meant "paella," not "pella." "One day one" is awkward — use "every day." Paella and churros are foods, so use "are" and the plural "foods."

  4. Original: I couldn't get enough of them.It's very yummy.
    Corrected: I couldn't get enough of them. They were very yummy.
    Explanation: Use a space after a period. "Them" is plural, so use "they were" instead of "it's."

  5. Original: We used to find must- go restaurant using travel site.
    Corrected: We found must-visit restaurants using a travel site.
    Explanation: "Used to" implies a repeated past habit, which doesn't fit here. "Must-go" → "must-visit" is more natural. Add articles like "a" before "travel site" and use the plural "restaurants."

  6. Original: There were many attractions and sightseeing spot.
    Corrected: There were many attractions and sightseeing spots.
    Explanation: "Spots" should be plural to match "many."

  7. Original: Even if we took a picture thoughtlessly, the picture came out amazing.
    Corrected: Even when we took pictures without much thought, they came out amazing.
    Explanation: "Thoughtlessly" is awkward here; "without much thought" sounds more natural. "Pictures" matches the general idea better.

  8. Original: we booked gaudi group tour.
    Corrected: We booked a Gaudí group tour.
    Explanation: Capitalize "We" and "Gaudí" (use accent mark if possible). Add "a" before "Gaudí group tour."

  9. Original: It was easy to understand about history and hidden story Gaudie's architectural from guide.
    Corrected: It was easy to understand the history and hidden stories of Gaudí’s architecture from the guide.
    Explanation: Remove "about" after "understand." Use plural "stories," possessive "Gaudí’s," and correct word order.

  10. Original: It was wonderful trip.
    Corrected: It was a wonderful trip.
    Explanation: Use the article "a" before singular countable nouns like "trip."


Final Edited Text

 We went to Barcelona for 7 days. We were tired from adjusting to the jet lag for 2 days. We had paella and churros every day, which are traditional Spanish foods. I couldn't get enough of them. They were very yummy. We found must-visit restaurants using a travel site. There were many attractions and sightseeing spots. Even when we took pictures without much thought, they came out amazing. We booked a Gaudí group tour. It was easy to understand the history and hidden stories of Gaudí’s architecture from the guide. It was a wonderful trip.


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