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I am going to family trip for 1 weeks to Spain. There is the place where I always want to go. I considered to trip for a while. because after took a ticket, suddenly my son got fever and had a bad caught 5days ago. Fortunately as took a medicine as his fever was gone. It was just fever through from sore throat. We almost cancel. We plane will arrive at evening. It is good having a trip because school allow to go to trip with family limited to 14days. I hope we have great healing time safety.

I am going to family trip for 1 weeks to Spain. There is the place where I always want to go. I considered to trip for a while. because after took a ticket, suddenly my son got fever and had a bad caught 5days ago. Fortunately as took a medicine as his fever was gone. It was just fever through from sore throat. We almost cancel. We plane will arrive at evening. It is good having a trip because school allow to go to trip with family limited to 14days. I hope we have great healing time safety.
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Original:

I am going to family trip for 1 weeks to Spain.
Corrected: I am going on a family trip to Spain for one week.
Explanation:

  • “going to” → “going on” (we say “go on a trip”)

  • “family trip” needs an article: “a family trip”

  • “1 weeks” → “one week” (agreement: singular form with “one”)


Original:

There is the place where I always want to go.
Corrected: It’s a place I’ve always wanted to visit.
Explanation:

  • “There is the place” → sounds unnatural; better: “It’s a place…”

  • “always want to go” → needs present perfect for a long-time desire: “have always wanted”

  • “go” → “visit” fits better for a travel context


Original:

I considered to trip for a while.
Corrected: I considered the trip for a while.
Explanation:

  • “considered to trip” is incorrect. “Consider” is followed by a noun or gerund, not an infinitive.

  • “trip” should be preceded by “the”


Original:

because after took a ticket, suddenly my son got fever and had a bad caught 5days ago.
Corrected: Because after we bought the ticket, my son suddenly got a fever and had a bad cough five days ago.
Explanation:

  • “after took a ticket” → incorrect verb form. Use “after we bought the ticket”

  • “got fever” → should be “got a fever”

  • “caught” → should be “cough” (wrong word used)

  • “5days” → “five days” (spelling and spacing)


Original:

Fortunately as took a medicine as his fever was gone.
Corrected: Fortunately, after taking medicine, his fever went away.
Explanation:

  • The structure was awkward and grammatically incorrect. Rewritten for clarity

  • “as took a medicine” → “after taking medicine”

  • “was gone” → better to say “went away” in this context


Original:

It was just fever through from sore throat.
Corrected: It was just a fever caused by a sore throat.
Explanation:

  • “just fever” → needs article: “just a fever”

  • “through from” → unnatural phrasing; better: “caused by”


Original:

We almost cancel.
Corrected: We almost canceled.
Explanation:

  • “cancel” → needs past tense: “canceled”


Original:

We plane will arrive at evening.
Corrected: Our plane will arrive in the evening.
Explanation:

  • “We plane” → should be “Our plane”

  • “at evening” → correct preposition is “in the evening”


Original:

It is good having a trip because school allow to go to trip with family limited to 14days.
Corrected: It’s good to take a trip because the school allows family trips for up to 14 days.
Explanation:

  • “It is good having a trip” → better: “It’s good to take a trip”

  • “school allow” → needs subject and verb agreement: “the school allows”

  • “to go to trip” → should be “family trips” or “to take a trip with family”

  • “limited to 14days” → rephrased for clarity: “for up to 14 days”


Original:

I hope we have great healing time safety.
Corrected: I hope we have a safe and healing trip.
Explanation:

  • “great healing time safety” is unclear and ungrammatical

  • Rephrased naturally: “a safe and healing trip”


Final, Edited Version:

I am going on a family trip to Spain for one week. It’s a place I’ve always wanted to visit. I considered the trip for a while because after we bought the ticket, my son suddenly got a fever and had a bad cough five days ago. Fortunately, after taking medicine, his fever went away. It was just a fever caused by a sore throat. We almost canceled. Our plane will arrive in the evening. It’s good to take a trip because the school allows family trips for up to 14 days. I hope we have a safe and healing trip.


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