I agree that students should make their own decisions for their futures. First, parents disagree letting students make decisions because they are worried that their children make bad decisions. However, to think children’s future, they will have time in the future even once making decisions. But think, is children deciding to go to the playground important or choosing what company they want to go is important?
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CORRECTION:
I agree that students should make their own decisions about their futures. Parents often disagree with this idea because they worry that their children might make poor choices. However, when thinking about the future, children will eventually need to make important decisions on their own. For example, is choosing to go to the playground more important, or choosing which company to work for in the future? I believe most people would choose the second option. Just like this, there will be many important decisions children will have to make as they grow. That’s why I think it’s better for them to start practicing making small decisions now, so they can be prepared for their future.
Suggestions for better ways to say things:
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Instead of: "parents disagree letting students make decisions..."
Try: "parents often disagree with allowing their children to make decisions..." -
Instead of: "they will have time in the future even once making decisions."
Try: "they will eventually need to make decisions on their own in the future." -
Instead of: "is children deciding to go to the playground important..."
Try: "is it more important for children to decide whether to go to the playground..."
