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I think teenagers shouldn’t be allowed to get plastic surgery, and here’s why. First, it costs too much money. For example, even just getting a nose job can cost more than $50. If someone gets full facial surgery, it could cost over $300. Second, teenagers are not mature enough to make such serious decisions. For instance, when they see someone who looks very attractive, they might want to look like them and rush into getting surgery without thinking it through. Lastly, some people argue that teenagers should be free to do what they want, including plastic surgery. While we should respect their freedom, adults also have the responsibility to guide and protect them. For example, if I’m an adult and my child wants plastic surgery, I believe I have the right to stop them for their own good. For these reasons, I believe teenagers should not get plastic surgery.

 

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Corrections and Why:

 

Grammar and punctuation: You had issues like "firstly" (can just say "First") and a comma used as a period ("Secondly.,"). These were cleaned for proper writing.

 

Word choice: "Nose plastic surgery" → "nose job" or "getting a nose job" sounds more natural. "Entirely" → "full facial surgery" is clearer.

 

Clarity and logic: Some parts needed smoother explanations, like “we also have our authority” was unclear. It’s better to say “adults have the responsibility to guide.”