Last Saturday, my mom's family got together on my grandma's birthday. We bought a carnation pot and a cacti pot with succulents. Then we went to a buffet restaurant, an appointment place, and families met. I gave her the flowerpots and wished her a happy birthday. Smoked sausage was the best because it suited my taste among the dishes. I ate a lot of them with mac and cheese. After that, my cousin and I played badminton, and we enjoyed board games
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Here are the corrections:
1. Original:
Last Saturday, my mom's family got together on my grandma's birthday.
Corrected:
Last Saturday, my mom’s family got together for my grandma’s birthday.
Explanation:
We use “for” when referring to the reason for a gathering or celebration (e.g., for her birthday).
2. Original:
We bought a carnation pot and a cacti pot with succulents.
Corrected:
We bought a pot of carnations and a cactus pot with succulents.
Explanation:
“Cacti” is plural; "a cactus pot" is more natural here. Also, “a pot of carnations” is clearer and more idiomatic.
3. Original:
Then we went to a buffet restaurant, an appointment place, and families met.
Corrected:
Then we went to a buffet restaurant, the meeting place, where our families gathered.
Explanation:
“Appointment place” is awkward; “meeting place” fits better. Also, “where our families gathered” is smoother than “and families met.”
4. Original:
I gave her the flowerpots and wished her a happy birthday.
Corrected:
✅ This sentence is already correct and natural.
Explanation:
No change needed.
5. Original:
Smoked sausage was the best because it suited my taste among the dishes.
Corrected:
The smoked sausage was the best because it suited my taste among all the dishes.
Explanation:
Adding “the” and “all” makes the sentence clearer and more specific.
6. Original:
I ate a lot of them with mac and cheese.
Corrected:
✅ This sentence is correct and natural.
Explanation:
No change needed.
7. Original:
After that, my cousin and I played badminton, and we enjoyed board games.
Corrected:
✅ This sentence is also correct and natural.
Explanation:
No change needed.
Final Edited Version:
Last Saturday, my mom’s family got together for my grandma’s birthday. We bought a pot of carnations and a cactus pot with succulents. Then we went to a buffet restaurant, the meeting place, where our families gathered. I gave her the flowerpots and wished her a happy birthday. The smoked sausage was the best because it suited my taste among all the dishes. I ate a lot of them with mac and cheese. After that, my cousin and I played badminton, and we enjoyed board games.
