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Fanally, my allergic symptoms gone. I think I get to having a symptoms according to some stimulation. After taking a antibiotics I don't think my stomach is good. Maybe I am sensitive person, so I might just in a mood. Today was a sunny day. I can't perfect weekend without a dessert cafe. Certainly without a second tought eating what I want, even though it is higher calories and not good for heathy is healing for me. Make sure sweets is my happiness.On the way home I bought a favorite food more.

Fanally, my allergic symptoms gone. I think I get to having a symptoms according to some stimulation. After taking a antibiotics I don't think my stomach is good. Maybe I am sensitive person, so I might just in a mood. Today was a sunny day. I can't perfect weekend without a dessert cafe. Certainly without a second tought eating what I want, even though it is higher calories and not good for heathy is healing for me. Make sure sweets is my happiness.On the way home I bought a favorite food more.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: Fanally, my allergic symptoms gone.
    Corrected: Finally, my allergic symptoms are gone.
    Explanation:

    • Fanally → spelling error → Finally

    • gone needs a verb → are gone (present perfect)

  2. Original: I think I get to having a symptoms according to some stimulation.
    Corrected: I think I get symptoms from certain triggers.
    Explanation:

    • get to having a symptoms → awkward and grammatically incorrect

    • a symptoms → article mismatch; symptoms is plural

    • according to some stimulation → unnatural; use from certain triggers

  3. Original: After taking a antibiotics I don't think my stomach is good.
    Corrected: After taking antibiotics, I don't think my stomach feels good.
    Explanation:

    • a antibioticsantibiotics is uncountable → remove a

    • Add a comma after the introductory phrase

    • is goodfeels good sounds more natural for health context

  4. Original: Maybe I am sensitive person, so I might just in a mood.
    Corrected: Maybe I am a sensitive person, so I might just be in a mood.
    Explanation:

    • Missing article → a sensitive person

    • Missing verb be in might just be in a mood

  5. Original: Today was a sunny day.
    ✅ This sentence is correct.

  6. Original: I can't perfect weekend without a dessert cafe.
    Corrected: I can't have a perfect weekend without a dessert cafe.
    Explanation:

    • Missing verb → have a perfect weekend

  7. Original: Certainly without a second tought eating what I want, even though it is higher calories and not good for heathy is healing for me.
    Corrected: Certainly, without a second thought, eating what I want—even if it’s high in calories and not healthy—feels healing for me.
    Explanation:

    • tought → spelling → thought

    • Run-on sentence fixed with punctuation

    • higher calorieshigh in calories

    • heathy → spelling → healthy

  8. Original: Make sure sweets is my happiness.
    Corrected: One thing is for sure—sweets are my happiness.
    Explanation:

    • Make sure is not correct in this context

    • sweets is plural → are, not is

  9. Original: On the way home I bought a favorite food more.
    Corrected: On the way home, I bought more of my favorite food.
    Explanation:

    • Rearranged for clarity and grammatical structure

    • Added of my and more of for natural phrasing

    • Added comma after introductory phrase


Final Edited Text:

Finally, my allergic symptoms are gone. I think I get symptoms from certain triggers. After taking antibiotics, I don't think my stomach feels good. Maybe I am a sensitive person, so I might just be in a mood. Today was a sunny day. I can't have a perfect weekend without a dessert cafe. Certainly, without a second thought, eating what I want—even if it’s high in calories and not healthy—feels healing for me. One thing is for sure—sweets are my happiness. On the way home, I bought more of my favorite food.


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