about older kid's health. I alway say don't worry. From when I was young, I suggested my dad to quing smoke.He kept to smoking for a long time. After having a baby,We were force him for baby's health again. We pushed it him for health of all together and he succeeded it. I guess grandchild is valuable to grandparents.
When we met my parents for parents day. It was a great time. I heard If rasing a child, if become a mom, you'll mature. I agree it. I get to express more. They still concern
about older kid's health. I alway say don't worry. From when I was young, I suggested my dad to quing smoke.He kept to smoking for a long time. After having a baby,We were force him for baby's health again. We pushed it him for health of all together and he succeeded it. I guess grandchild is valuable to grandparents.
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Here are the corrections:
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Original: When we met my parents for parents day.
Corrected: We met my parents for Parents' Day.
Explanation: This was a sentence fragment. “When” makes it sound incomplete. Removing “When” makes it a complete sentence. Also, "Parents' Day" should be capitalized and use the possessive apostrophe. -
Original: It was a great time.
✅ Correct — no change needed.
Explanation: This is a complete and grammatically correct sentence. -
Original: I heard If rasing a child, if become a mom, you'll mature.
Corrected: I heard that if you raise a child and become a mom, you’ll mature.
Explanation: “Rasing” → “raise” (spelling); “if become” needs a subject — changed to “if you raise a child and become a mom”; added “that” after “heard” to complete the clause. -
Original: I agree it.
Corrected: I agree with it.
Explanation: “Agree” is a verb that needs the preposition “with” before an object. -
Original: I get to express more.
✅ Correct — no change needed.
Explanation: This is a correct use of “get to” meaning opportunity or ability. -
Original: They still concern about older kid's health.
Corrected: They still worry about their older child’s health.
Explanation: “Concern” is a noun; “worry” is the correct verb. “Older kid” is better expressed as “older child,” and possessive form “child’s” is needed. -
Original: I alway say don't worry.
Corrected: I always say, “Don’t worry.”
Explanation: “Alway” → “always” (spelling); add quotation marks around direct speech. -
Original: From when I was young, I suggested my dad to quing smoke.
Corrected: Since I was young, I have been encouraging my dad to quit smoking.
Explanation: "Suggested” is often used for one-time suggestions. If you’ve done it repeatedly over time, “have been encouraging” fits better. -
Original: He kept to smoking for a long time.
Corrected: He kept smoking for a long time.
Explanation: “Kept to smoking” is incorrect; “kept smoking” is the correct verb phrase. -
Original: After having a baby,We were force him for baby's health again.
Corrected: After having a baby, we tried to force him to quit for the baby’s health again.
Explanation: “We were force” → “we tried to force” (verb correction); clarify what “for” means — “to quit for the baby’s health.” -
Original: We pushed it him for health of all together and he succeeded it.
Corrected: We pushed him for everyone’s health, and he succeeded.
Explanation: “Pushed it him” → “pushed him”; “health of all together” → “everyone’s health”; “succeeded it” → “succeeded” (no object needed). -
Original: I guess grandchild is valuable to grandparents.
Corrected: I guess a grandchild is very precious to grandparents.
Explanation: Add article “a”; “valuable” is okay but “precious” is more natural in this context.
Final Edited Text:
We met my parents for Parents' Day. It was a great time. I heard that if you raise a child and become a mom, you’ll mature. I agree with that. I get to express myself more. They still worry about their older child’s health, and I always say, “Don’t worry.” Since I was young, I have been encouraging my dad to quit smoking. He kept smoking for a long time. After having a baby, we tried to force him to quit again for the baby’s health. We pushed him for everyone’s health, and he succeeded. I guess a grandchild is very precious to grandparents.
