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Our family and my father's relatives gathered their ancestor grave. We had a memorial service before but the elder got rid of that. Because mother is getting ages and it's hard to prepare for it. So we move into the charnel house instead memorial service. we get a pay regularly then get service take care of our area. After I got married I didn't goto there with my parents often. I met relatives with my son for the first time in a long time. And my parents liked to doing together

Our family and my father's relatives gathered their ancestor grave. We had a memorial service before but the elder got rid of that. Because mother is getting ages and it's hard to prepare for it. So we move into the charnel house instead memorial service. we get a pay regularly then get service take care of our area. After I got married I didn't goto there with my parents often. I met relatives with my son for the first time in a long time. And my parents liked to doing together
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Here are the corrections:

1. Original:
   Our family and my father's relatives gathered their ancestor grave.
   Corrected:
   Our family and my father's relatives gathered at their ancestors' grave.
   Explanation:

   • Use “gathered at” to indicate a location.

   • “Ancestor” should be plural possessive “ancestors’” to show it’s the grave belonging to multiple ancestors.

2. Original:
   We had a memorial service before but the elder got rid of that.
   Corrected:
   We used to have a memorial service, but the elder decided to stop it.
   Explanation:

   • “Used to” is more natural for a past habit.

   • “Got rid of that” is too informal; “decided to stop it” sounds clearer and more respectful.

3. Original:
   Because mother is getting ages and it's hard to prepare for it.
   Corrected:
   This is because my mother is getting older, and it’s hard to prepare for it.
   Explanation:

   • “Getting ages” is incorrect. Use “getting older.”

   • A full sentence requires a subject, so “This is because…” completes the idea.

4. Original:
   So we move into the charnel house instead memorial service.
   Corrected:
   So we moved the remains to a charnel house instead of holding a memorial service.
   Explanation:

   • Use past tense “moved.”

   • “Instead of holding” explains the replacement.

   • “Move into” is not suitable for remains; clarify the action.

5. Original:
   we get a pay regularly then get service take care of our area.
   Corrected:
   We pay regularly for a service that takes care of our area.
   Explanation:

   • “Get a pay” is incorrect; use “pay for.”

   • Clarify the meaning with “a service that takes care of.”

6. Original:
   After I got married I didn't goto there with my parents often.
   Corrected:
   After I got married, I didn’t go there with my parents often.
   Explanation:

   • “Goto” should be two words: “go to.”

   • Add a comma after “married” for clarity.

7. Original:
   I met relatives with my son for the first time in a long time.
   Corrected:
   I met my relatives with my son for the first time in a long time.
   Explanation:

   • Add “my” before “relatives” to make the sentence more specific.

8. Original:
   And my parents liked to doing together
   Corrected:
   My parents enjoyed doing it together.
   Explanation:

   • “Liked to doing” is incorrect; use “enjoyed doing.”

   • “It” refers back to the visit or gathering.

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Final Edited Version:

Our family and my father's relatives gathered at their ancestors' grave. We used to have a memorial service, but the elder decided to stop it. This is because my mother is getting older, and it’s hard to prepare for it. So we moved the remains to a charnel house instead of holding a memorial service. We pay regularly for a service that takes care of our area. After I got married, I didn’t go there with my parents often. I met my relatives with my son for the first time in a long time, and my parents enjoyed doing it together.