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I usually do exercise. I didn't like exercise from day one. I didn't body shape that gain weight easily. But after having a baby, from then I have had pained body and gained weight. After doing chores or walking, my joints felt sore. Also swollen joints made me felt hurt. So I had been treatment for joints. from back then I've beening workout almost everyday.it seemed to build muscle can ease my pain. I felt like I am back to life. My body conditions are best now and that that give me energy

I usually do exercise. I didn't like exercise from day one. I didn't body shape that gain weight easily. But after having a baby, from then I have had pained body and gained weight. After doing chores or walking, my joints felt sore. Also swollen joints made me felt hurt. So I had been treatment for joints. from back then I've beening workout almost everyday.it seemed to build muscle can ease my pain. I felt like I am back to life. My body conditions are best now and that that give me energy
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✅ Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: I usually do exercise.
    Corrected: I usually exercise.
    Explanation: "Do exercise" is not incorrect, but "exercise" as a verb is more natural and concise.

  2. Original: I didn't like exercise from day one.
    Corrected: I didn’t like exercising from the beginning.
    Explanation: "Exercising" is more natural after "like." "From day one" is fine but "from the beginning" is smoother here.

  3. Original: I didn't body shape that gain weight easily.
    Corrected: I didn’t have a body type that gains weight easily.
    Explanation: The sentence was missing a subject and verb ("have a body type") and had incorrect verb tense ("gain" → "gains").

  4. Original: But after having a baby, from then I have had pained body and gained weight.
    Corrected: But after having a baby, I started experiencing body pain and gained weight.
    Explanation: "Pained body" is awkward. "Started experiencing body pain" is more natural. "From then" is redundant and was removed.

  5. Original: After doing chores or walking, my joints felt sore.
    Correct as is (very minor revision optional): After doing chores or going for a walk, my joints felt sore.

  6. Original: Also swollen joints made me felt hurt.
    Corrected: Also, swollen joints made me feel pain.
    Explanation: "Made me felt" is incorrect. It should be "made me feel." "Feel pain" is more appropriate than "felt hurt" in this context.

  7. Original: So I had been treatment for joints.
    Corrected: So I received treatment for my joints.
    Explanation: "Had been treatment" is grammatically incorrect. The correct form is "received treatment."

  8. Original: from back then I've beening workout almost everyday.
    Corrected: Since then, I’ve been working out almost every day.
    Explanation: "From back then" should be "Since then." "Beening workout" is incorrect; correct form is "been working out." "Everyday" (adj.) should be "every day" (adv.).

  9. Original: it seemed to build muscle can ease my pain.
    Corrected: It seems that building muscle can ease my pain.
    Explanation: The sentence needed clearer structure. "Building muscle" is the subject of "can ease."

  10. Original: I felt like I am back to life.
    Corrected: I felt like I came back to life.
    Explanation: "Felt" should be followed by "came" to match the past tense. "Back to life" is fine and expressive.

  11. Original: My body conditions are best now and that that give me energy.
    Corrected: My body is in the best condition now, and that gives me energy.
    Explanation: "Body conditions" should be singular: "body is in the best condition." "That that" is likely a typo. "Gives" agrees with "that."


Final Edited Text:

I usually exercise. I didn’t like exercising from the beginning. I didn’t have a body type that gains weight easily. But after having a baby, I started experiencing body pain and gained weight. After doing chores or going for a walk, my joints felt sore. Also, swollen joints made me feel pain. So I received treatment for my joints. Since then, I’ve been working out almost every day. It seems that building muscle can ease my pain. I felt like I came back to life. My body is in the best condition now, and that gives me energy.


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