I think card games shouldn’t be banned in school. First of all, it can be very beneficial to students for their educations. However, some people can say, “How can games be helpful to students, it’s nonsense!” For example, chess is a type of game, but we should use our knowledge to win the game. To explain, our memorization or practical strategy. To conclude, I think school should allow students to play general games in school because it can be an advantage for students.
CORRECTION:
I believe card games shouldn't be banned in schools. First of all, they can be very beneficial for students' education. Some might argue, "How can games be helpful to students? That’s nonsense!" However, consider chess as an example, it's a type of game that requires us to use our knowledge to win. This involves memorization and strategic thinking. In conclusion, I believe schools should allow students to play games because they can provide valuable learning opportunities.
Explanation for the mistakes:
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"I think" was changed to "I believe" for a more formal tone.
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"can be very beneficial to students for their educations" was simplified to "can be very beneficial for students' education" for clarity.
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The sentence "some people can say" was changed to "some might argue" for a more natural expression.
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"To explain" was replaced with "This involves" for smoother connection to the example.
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"general games" was changed to "games" for simplicity.
