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My parents and I spent at a nice pool villa for last weekend. The weather was not good, but we could enjoy swimming because there was a private swimming pool with a hot tub. It was getting warm recently. Then it rained and got cold that day. It was sunny, rainy, snowy, and haily. I felt like I had experienced four seasons. Looking at the weather today, it wasn't cold at all.

My parents and I spent at a nice pool villa for last weekend. The weather was not good, but we could enjoy swimming because there was a private swimming pool with a hot tub. It was getting warm recently. Then it rained and got cold that day. It was sunny, rainy, snowy, and haily. I felt like I had experienced four seasons. Looking at the weather today, it wasn't cold at all.

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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: My parents and I spent at a nice pool villa for last weekend.
    Corrected: My parents and I stayed at a nice pool villa last weekend.
    👉 "Spent at" is incorrect. We use "stayed at" for a place. Also, "for last weekend" should just be "last weekend."

  2. Original: The weather was not good, but we could enjoy swimming because there was a private swimming pool with a hot tub.
    Corrected: (No change needed.)
    👉 This sentence is good!

  3. Original: It was getting warm recently.
    Corrected: It had been getting warm recently.
    👉 We need to use "had been" to show that the warm weather happened before the day it got cold.

  4. Original: Then it rained and got cold that day.
    Corrected: Then it rained and got cold on that day.
    👉 Adding "on" makes it a little more clear and natural.

  5. Original: It was sunny, rainy, snowy, and haily.
    Corrected: It was sunny, rainy, snowy, and hailing.
    👉 "Haily" is not a word. We say "hailing" instead.

  6. Original: I felt like I had experienced four seasons.
    Corrected: (No change needed.)
    👉 This is a nice sentence!

  7. Original: Looking at the weather today, it wasn't cold at all.
    Corrected: Looking at the weather today, it isn’t cold at all.
    👉 Use "isn’t" instead of "wasn’t" because you are talking about today (now).


Final Edited Text:

 

My parents and I stayed at a nice pool villa last weekend. The weather was not good, but we could enjoy swimming because there was a private swimming pool with a hot tub. It had been getting warm recently. Then it rained and got cold on that day. It was sunny, rainy, snowy, and hailing. I felt like I had experienced four seasons. Looking at the weather today, it isn’t cold at all.


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