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It was my grandma's birthday. We got together and celbrate with cake.She still likes fit in gorgeous outfit and get some ai and having a delicious food. We went to sa-bu restaurant has salad bar like a buffet. After getting married I haven't met her more than before. During the holiday, I have to follow to memorial service in a law. She felt a bummer. But she said it is Korean culture that having with women.I was happy. It's a been a while we got together.I hope we often meet during she alive

It was my grandma's birthday. We got together and celbrate with cake.She still likes fit in gorgeous outfit and get some ai and having a delicious food. We went to sa-bu restaurant has salad bar like a buffet. After getting married I haven't met her more than before. During the holiday, I have to follow to memorial service in a law. She felt a bummer. But she said it is Korean culture that having with women.I was happy. It's a been a while we got together.I hope we often meet during she alive
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Here are the corrections:

1. Original:

It was my grandma's birthday.

Corrected:
It was my grandma’s birthday.
Explanation: This sentence is already correct.


2. Original:

We got together and celbrate with cake.

Corrected:
We got together and celebrated with cake.
Explanation: "Celbrate" is a spelling error → "celebrated" (past tense needed to match "got together").


3. Original:

She still likes fit in gorgeous outfit and get some ai and having a delicious food.

Corrected:
She still likes to fit into gorgeous outfits, get some air, and enjoy delicious food.
Explanation:

  • "likes fit" → should be "likes to fit" (verb pattern).

  • "in gorgeous outfit" → "into gorgeous outfits" (plural and proper preposition).

  • "get some ai" → likely meant "get some air."

  • "having a delicious food" → correct form is "enjoy delicious food" or "have delicious food" (no need for "a" with uncountable "food").


4. Original:

We went to sa-bu restaurant has salad bar like a buffet.

Corrected:
We went to Sabu, a restaurant that has a salad bar like a buffet.
Explanation:

  • "sa-bu" → corrected to "Sabu" (capitalization and formatting).

  • Combine properly: "a restaurant that has..." adds clarity and correct grammar.


5. Original:

After getting married I haven't met her more than before.

Corrected:
Since getting married, I haven't seen her as often as before.
Explanation:

  • "met" → "seen" is more natural here.

  • "more than before" → should be "as often as before" for proper comparison.


6. Original:

During the holiday, I have to follow to memorial service in a law.

Corrected:
During the holidays, I have to attend the memorial service with my in-laws.
Explanation:

  • "follow to" → incorrect. The correct verb is "attend."

  • "in a law" → should be "in-laws" (family-related term).

  • "holiday" → usually "holidays" in this context (plural for general times like Chuseok, Seollal, etc.).


7. Original:

She felt a bummer.

Corrected:
She felt disappointed.
Explanation:
"Felt a bummer" is not natural English. "A bummer" is a casual noun. Better to say "felt disappointed."


8. Original:

But she said it is Korean culture that having with women.

Corrected:
But she said it’s part of Korean culture for women to participate.
Explanation:

  • “having with women” → unclear and ungrammatical.

  • Rewritten for clarity and correct structure.


9. Original:

I was happy.

Corrected:
I was happy.
Explanation: This is already fine.


10. Original:

It's a been a while we got together.

Corrected:
It’s been a while since we got together.
Explanation:

  • "a been" → incorrect, should be "been."

  • Need "since" to connect the time expression correctly.


11. Original:

I hope we often meet during she alive.

Corrected:
I hope we can meet often while she’s still alive.
Explanation:

  • "during she alive" → incorrect. Use "while she’s still alive" for proper grammar and clarity.


Final Edited Text:

It was my grandma’s birthday. We got together and celebrated with cake. She still likes to fit into gorgeous outfits, get some air, and enjoy delicious food. We went to Sabu, a restaurant that has a salad bar like a buffet. Since getting married, I haven’t seen her as often as before. During the holidays, I have to attend the memorial service with my in-laws. She felt disappointed, but she said it’s part of Korean culture for women to participate. I was happy. It’s been a while since we got together. I hope we can meet often while she’s still alive.


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