Children should live on rural areas because they can live in friendly environments. Rural areas has more friendly environments, but cities has more bad environment than rural areas. Because since there ‘s many factories and vehicles that makes carbon-dioxide, which is not good for environment. On the other hand, rural areas has less things that can damage the environment . This shows that, students should live on rural areas because it is important to be healthy and rural areas are perfect place for that.
CORRECTION:
Children should live in rural areas because they offer a friendlier environment. Rural areas are more peaceful and less polluted than cities. Cities have many factories and vehicles that produce carbon dioxide, which harms the environment. On the other hand, rural areas have fewer sources of pollution. This shows that students should live in rural areas, as it is important for their health, and rural areas provide a perfect environment for that.
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Here’s a shorter explanation of the corrections:
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"On" → "In": Use "in" for places like rural areas.
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"Has" → "Have": "Areas" is plural, so use "have."
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"More friendly" → "Friendlier": Comparative form of "friendly."
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"Bad environment" → "Pollution": More specific and clear.
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"Makes" → "Produce": More accurate for emissions.
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"Not good for environment" → "Harms the environment": Clearer wording.
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"Less things" → "Fewer sources": "Fewer" is for countable items.
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"Be healthy" → "For their health": More natural phrasing.
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"Perfect place" → "Perfect environment": More specific and clear.
