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I met a friend.we are sharing together about kids education and development of kids. She is interested in education and book, So I asked her which book is fun, if she can recomed for me and him . She used to run the math academy. So we talk to about how to develop of good math. Because in korea math is very important. It's not just solve the question, to solve they have to ability to think more and need to literacy. So it is important to read a book too. Spend time with her is always good.

I met a friend.we are sharing together about kids education and development of kids. She is interested in education and book, So I asked her which book is fun, if she can recomed for me and him . She used to run the math academy. So we talk to about how to develop of good math. Because in korea math is very important. It's not just solve the question, to solve they have to ability to think more and need to literacy. So it is important to read a book too. Spend time with her is always good.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: I met a friend.
    Corrected: I met a friend. ✅
    This sentence is correct.

  2. Original: we are sharing together about kids education and development of kids.
    Corrected: We shared ideas about children's education and development.
    🧾 "Are sharing" should be in past tense to match "met." "Together" is redundant with "shared." "Kids education" should be "children’s education."

  3. Original: She is interested in education and book,
    Corrected: She is interested in education and books,
    🧾 "Book" should be plural: "books."

  4. Original: So I asked her which book is fun, if she can recomed for me and him.
    Corrected: So I asked her which book is fun and if she could recommend one for me and my child.
    🧾 "Recomed" → "recommend"; "me and him" → "me and my child" (for clarity); "can" → "could" (more natural and polite in context).

  5. Original: She used to run the math academy.
    Corrected: She used to run a math academy.
    🧾 Use "a" instead of "the" unless referring to a specific, previously known academy.

  6. Original: So we talk to about how to develop of good math.
    Corrected: So we talked about how to develop good math skills.
    🧾 "Talk to about" → "talked about"; "develop of" → "develop"; "good math" → "good math skills."

  7. Original: Because in korea math is very important.
    Corrected: Because in Korea, math is very important.
    🧾 "Korea" needs a capital letter and a comma after "Korea" improves the flow.

  8. Original: It's not just solve the question, to solve they have to ability to think more and need to literacy.
    Corrected: It’s not just about solving questions—they need the ability to think critically and have good literacy skills.
    🧾 Improve phrasing: "solve the question" → "solving questions"; "have to ability" → "need the ability"; "to literacy" → "literacy skills."

  9. Original: So it is important to read a book too.
    Corrected: So, reading books is also important.
    🧾 "To read a book" → "reading books" for generalization; "too" becomes "also" for smoother tone.

  10. Original: Spend time with her is always good.
    Corrected: Spending time with her is always nice.
    🧾 "Spend time" → "Spending time" (gerund); "good" → "nice" is a more natural expression in this context.


Final Edited Text:

I met a friend. We shared ideas about children's education and development. She is interested in education and books, so I asked her which book is fun and if she could recommend one for me and my child. She used to run a math academy, so we talked about how to develop good math skills. Because in Korea, math is very important. It's not just about solving questions—they need the ability to think critically and have good literacy skills. So, reading books is also important. Spending time with her is always nice.


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