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I happened to saw old friend who went to university with. In the morning on way home. She and I is 5 years apart. She went to university again changed into compsion major from law. Back then I used to give a violin lesson to her. We also performanced on stage with music she made. But after graduate we didn't often keep in touch. We only met reunion's wedding and their parents' s funeral. I've always though she is good person. So We noticed living nearby each other. We are supposed to catch up soon

I happened to saw old friend who went to university with. In the morning on way home. She and I is 5 years apart. She went to university again changed into compsion major from law. Back then I used to give a violin lesson to her. We also performanced on stage with music she made. But after graduate we didn't often keep in touch. We only met reunion's wedding and their parents' s funeral. I've always though she is good person. So We noticed living nearby each other. We are supposed to catch up soon

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Here are the corrections:

  1. (x) I happened to saw old friend who went to university with.
    (o) I happened to see an old friend whom I went to university with.
    Explanation:

    • "Happened to saw" → "Happened to see" (use base verb after "happened to").

    • "Old friend" needs an article → "an old friend."

    • "Who" should be "whom" (object of "went to university with").

  2. (x) In the morning on way home.
    (o) In the morning, on my way home.
    Explanation:

    • Needs "my" before "way home" for clarity.

    • Add a comma after "morning" for proper sentence structure.

  3. (x) She and I is 5 years apart.
    (o) She and I are five years apart.
    Explanation:

    • "Is" should be "are" (plural subject).

    • Write "five" instead of "5" in formal writing.

  4. (x) She went to university again changed into compsion major from law.
    (o) She went back to university and changed her major from law to composition.
    Explanation:

    • "Again changed into" → "Went back to university and changed."

    • "Compsion" should be "composition" (spelling error).

    • "Changed into" is incorrect; use "changed her major to."

  5. (x) Back then I used to give a violin lesson to her.
    (o) Back then, I used to give her violin lessons.
    Explanation:

    • "A violin lesson" should be plural ("violin lessons") for general meaning.

    • "To her" should be "give her" for natural phrasing.

  6. (x) We also performanced on stage with music she made.
    (o) We also performed on stage with music she composed.
    Explanation:

    • "Performanced" is incorrect; "performed" is the correct past tense.

    • "Music she made" → "Music she composed" (more natural).

  7. (x) But after graduate we didn't often keep in touch.
    (o) But after graduating, we didn’t stay in touch often.
    Explanation:

    • "After graduate" should be "after graduating" (verb form correction).

    • "Didn't often keep in touch" → "didn’t stay in touch often" (more natural).

  8. (x) We only met reunion's wedding and their parents' s funeral.
    (o) We only met at reunions, weddings, and our friends’ parents' funerals.
    Explanation:

    • "Reunion's wedding" is unclear; "at reunions, weddings" is better.

    • "Their parents' s funeral" → "our friends' parents' funerals" (clearer and grammatically correct).

  9. (x) I've always though she is good person.
    (o) I've always thought she is a good person.
    Explanation:

    • "Though" should be "thought" (correct past tense).

    • "Is good person" needs "a" → "a good person."

  10. (x) So We noticed living nearby each other.
    (o) So we realized we live near each other.
    Explanation:

  • "Noticed living" → "Realized we live" (more natural phrasing).

  • "Nearby each other" should be "near each other."

  1. (x) We are supposed to catch up soon. ✅ (Correct as is!)


Final Edited Text:

I happened to see an old friend whom I went to university with in the morning, on my way home. She and I are five years apart.

She went back to university and changed her major from law to composition. Back then, I used to give her violin lessons, and we also performed on stage with music she composed.

But after graduating, we didn’t stay in touch often. We only met at reunions, weddings, and our friends’ parents' funerals. I’ve always thought she is a good person.

 

Recently, we realized we live near each other, so we are supposed to catch up soon.


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