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Robot should replace human workers

I think Robots should replace human workers and here's why.
First, robot can do repetitive more better than humans. For example, when a human make 100 toys a day, robots will be able to make more than 150 toys a day .
Secondly, robots do not need time to take a rest. They only need time to charge. For example, when people need time for holidays, robots only need some hours to charge electricity.
Lastly, some people think robots can't do jobs that requires emotions buts thats are not true.

I think Robots should replace human workers and here's why.
First, robot can do repetitive more better than humans. For example, when a human make 100 toys a day, robots will be able to make more than 150 toys a day .
Secondly, robots do not need time to take a rest. They only need time to charge. For example, when people need time for holidays, robots only need some hours to charge electricity.
Lastly, some people think robots can't do jobs that requires emotions buts thats are not true.

 

Revised Debate Argument:

I believe robots should replace human workers, and here’s why:

First, robots can do repetitive tasks more efficiently than humans. For example, while a human might make 100 toys a day, robots could produce more than 150 toys daily.

Second, robots don’t need breaks. They only require time to recharge, unlike people who need holidays.

Lastly, some believe robots can't handle jobs that require emotions, but that’s not true. With AI improving, robots may be able to understand emotions in the near future.


Corrections Made:

  1. "robot" → "robots" for subject consistency.

  2. "more better" → "more efficiently" (corrected the redundancy).

  3. "when a human make" → "while a human might make" (subject-verb agreement and clarity).

  4. "time to take a rest" → "breaks" (simplified expression).

  5. "buts thats are not true" → "but that’s not true" (grammar correction).

  6. "Since the AIs are improving, they might be able to feel the emotions" → "With AI improving, robots may be able to understand emotions" (clarity and conciseness).


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