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I worried about how well my son is doing in class. I am not worry about learn subject. I wonder if he get along with friends well. Boy has wild and tough When hang out together get to fight and struggle harder than the girl .Boy has invisible rank of strong by themself like a physical strength or how smart he is. Sometimes he came back home pissed off. One of friend made fun of him. I said ignored it. I don't medle in his friendship. He have to solve that himself. I seems son grow alot. He told me I'll cope with it myself.He is brave boy.

I worried about how well my son is doing in class. I am not worry about learn subject. I wonder if he get along with friends well. Boy has wild and tough When hang out together get to fight and struggle harder than the girl .Boy has invisible rank of strong by themself like a physical strength or how smart he is. Sometimes he came back home pissed off. One of friend made fun of him. I said ignored it. I don't medle in his friendship. He have to solve that himself. I seems son grow alot. He told me I'll cope with it myself.He is brave boy.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: I worried about how well my son is doing in class.
    Corrected: I worry about how well my son is doing in class.
    Explanation: "Worried" is past tense, but since this is an ongoing concern, "worry" (present tense) is correct.

  2. Original: I am not worry about learn subject.
    Corrected: I am not worried about learning subjects.
    Explanation: "Worry" should be in past participle form ("worried") after "am." Also, "learn subject" should be "learning subjects" for correct verb and noun forms.

  3. Original: I wonder if he get along with friends well.
    Corrected: I wonder if he gets along well with his friends.
    Explanation: "He" is singular, so "get" should be "gets" to match subject-verb agreement. "Friends well" is awkward, so "gets along well with his friends" is clearer.

  4. Original: Boy has wild and tough.
    Corrected: Boys are wild and tough.
    Explanation: "Boy" should be plural ("Boys") to talk about boys in general. "Has" should be "are" since we are describing a state.

  5. Original: When hang out together get to fight and struggle harder than the girl.
    Corrected: When boys hang out together, they tend to fight and struggle more than girls.
    Explanation: "When hang out together" needs a subject ("When boys hang out together"). "Get to fight" is unnatural, so "they tend to fight" is better. "Harder than the girl" should be "more than girls" for correct comparison.

  6. Original: Boy has invisible rank of strong by themself like a physical strength or how smart he is.
    Corrected: Boys have an invisible ranking of strength among themselves, based on physical power or intelligence.
    Explanation: "Boy" should be "Boys." "Has" should be "have" (plural subject). "Invisible rank of strong" should be "invisible ranking of strength" for correct phrasing. "By themself" should be "among themselves" for plural agreement. "Like a physical strength or how smart he is" should be "based on physical power or intelligence" for clarity.

  7. Original: Sometimes he came back home pissed off.
    Corrected: Sometimes, he comes home feeling upset.
    Explanation: "Came" should be "comes" for present tense consistency. "Pissed off" is informal; "feeling upset" is more appropriate.

  8. Original: One of friend made fun of him.
    Corrected: One of his friends made fun of him.
    Explanation: "One of friend" should be "One of his friends" for correct plural agreement.

  9. Original: I said ignored it.
    Corrected: I told him to ignore it.
    Explanation: "Said ignored" is incorrect. "Told him to ignore it" is the correct structure.

  10. Original: I don't medle in his friendship.
    Corrected: I don’t meddle in his friendships.
    Explanation: "Medle" is a misspelling; "meddle" is correct. "Friendship" should be "friendships" to refer to all of them.

  11. Original: He have to solve that himself.
    Corrected: He has to solve that himself.
    Explanation: "He" is singular, so "have" should be "has."

  12. Original: I seems son grow alot.
    Corrected: It seems my son has grown a lot.
    Explanation: "I seems" should be "It seems." "Son grow" should be "my son has grown" for correct verb tense. "Alot" should be "a lot."

  13. Original: He told me I'll cope with it myself.
    Corrected: He told me, "I’ll cope with it myself."
    Explanation: Direct quotes should be in quotation marks.

  14. Original: He is brave boy.
    Corrected: He is a brave boy.
    Explanation: "Brave boy" needs an article: "a brave boy."

Final Edited Text:

I worry about how well my son is doing in class. I am not worried about learning subjects. I wonder if he gets along well with his friends. Boys are wild and tough.

When boys hang out together, they tend to fight and struggle more than girls. Boys have an invisible ranking of strength among themselves, based on physical power or intelligence.

Sometimes, he comes home feeling upset. One of his friends made fun of him. I told him to ignore it. I don’t meddle in his friendships. He has to solve that himself.

 

It seems my son has grown a lot. He told me, "I’ll cope with it myself." He is a brave boy.

 


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