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When get a good new We said dinner is on you. We treat it. We hold a party with sincerely closer. Someone get promoted is on dinner and invite to celebrate with co-work after set up each other's time available and to do place. Usually closer people hang out. Or in official staff party we congratulate together. We can notice already who will promoted.Usally it getting work in longer, it has a little priority. We alreay prepare his present or congratulate. it seems to different To each his own.

When get a good new We said dinner is on you. We treat it. We hold a party with sincerely closer. Someone get promoted is on dinner and invite to celebrate with co-work after set up each other's time available and to do place. Usually closer people hang out. Or in official staff party we congratulate together. We can notice already who will promoted.Usally it getting work in longer, it has a little priority. We alreay prepare his present or congratulate. it seems to different To each his own.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. (x) When get a good new We said dinner is on you.
    (o) When we get good news, we say, "Dinner is on you!"
    Explanation:

    • "When get a good new" → Needs a subject ("we") and correct phrasing: "When we get good news."
    • "Said" → Should be "say" for a general statement.
    • "Good new" → "News" is uncountable, so "good news" is correct.
  2. (x) We treat it.
    (o) We celebrate it.
    Explanation:

    • "Treat" is incorrect in this context; "celebrate" is the correct verb for marking an occasion.
  3. (x) We hold a party with sincerely closer.
    (o) We hold a party with close friends and colleagues.
    Explanation:

    • "Sincerely closer" is incorrect. The correct phrase is "close friends and colleagues."
  4. (x) Someone get promoted is on dinner and invite to celebrate with co-work after set up each other's time available and to do place.
    (o) When someone gets promoted, they host a dinner and invite coworkers to celebrate after setting a time and choosing a place.
    Explanation:

    • "Someone get promoted" → Should be "someone gets promoted" (subject-verb agreement).
    • "Is on dinner" → Unclear phrase; "they host a dinner" is correct.
    • "Co-work" → Should be "coworkers."
    • "After set up each other's time available and to do place" → Needs rewording for clarity.
  5. (x) Usually closer people hang out.
    (o) Usually, close friends hang out together.
    Explanation:

    • "Closer people" is unnatural; "close friends" sounds better.
    • "Hang out" → Adding "together" makes the sentence clearer.
  6. (x) Or in official staff party we congratulate together.
    (o) At official staff parties, we celebrate together.
    Explanation:

    • "Or" is unnecessary.
    • "In official staff party" → Should be "At official staff parties" (plural and correct preposition).
    • "Congratulate together" is unnatural; "celebrate together" is better.
  7. (x) We can notice already who will promoted.
    (o) We can already tell who will be promoted.
    Explanation:

    • "Notice already" → Should be "already tell" for natural phrasing.
    • "Who will promoted" → Should be "who will be promoted" (correct verb form).
  8. (x) Usally it getting work in longer, it has a little priority.
    (o) Usually, those who have worked longer get priority.
    Explanation:

    • "Usally" → Spelling error, should be "Usually."
    • "It getting work in longer" → Needs rewording for clarity.
    • "It has a little priority" → "Get priority" is more natural.
  9. (x) We alreay prepare his present or congratulate.
    (o) We already prepare a gift or congratulate them.
    Explanation:

    • "Alreay" → Spelling error, should be "already."
    • "His present" → "A gift" is more general.
    • "Or congratulate" → Needs "them" as an object.
  10. (x) It seems to different To each his own.
    (o) It seems different for everyone. To each their own.
    Explanation:

    • "It seems to different" → Should be "It seems different for everyone."
    • "To each his own" → "Their" is more inclusive than "his."

Final Edited Text:

When we get good news, we say, "Dinner is on you!" We celebrate by holding a party with close friends and colleagues. When someone gets promoted, they host a dinner and invite coworkers to celebrate after setting a time and choosing a place. Usually, close friends hang out together, or at official staff parties, we celebrate as a group. 

We can already tell who will be promoted. Usually, those who have worked longer get priority. We already prepare a gift or congratulate them in advance. Everyone has their own way of celebrating—it seems different for everyone. To each their own!


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