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On the other hand I am jealous of her. We used to have a blind group meeting with another boys often . Other friend and I kept it to her.in some performances test, She held a chances than me I felt happy for her but I felt bad for me. I think I was very young. She haven't upset to me at all. Everyday she said I am okay let 's do it your way. She was very kind. We have similar things Wedding day, having a baby. which happened in a same years .So we was going every conversation well.

On the other hand I am jealous of her. We used to have a blind group meeting with another boys often . Other friend and I kept it to her.in some performances test, She held a chances than me I felt happy for her but I felt bad for me. I think I was very young. She haven't upset to me at all. Everyday she said I am okay let 's do it your way. She was very kind. We have similar things Wedding day, having a baby. which happened in a same years .So we was going every conversation well.

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Here are the corrections:

  1. On the other hand I am jealous of her.
    On the other hand, I feel jealous of her.
    Error: "I am jealous of her" is grammatically correct, but "I feel jealous of her" sounds more natural in this context. Also, a comma should be placed after "On the other hand," for proper sentence structure.

  2. We used to have a blind group meeting with another boys often.
    We used to have group blind dates with other boys often.
    Error: "Blind group meeting" is unclear; "group blind dates" makes the meaning clearer. "Another boys" should be "other boys", since "another" is used for singular nouns, while "other" is used for plural.

  3. Other friend and I kept it to her.
    Another friend and I kept it from her.
    Error: "Other friend" should be "Another friend". "Kept it to her" is incorrect; "kept it from her" is the correct phrase when hiding something from someone.

  4. In some performances test, She held a chances than me I felt happy for her but I felt bad for me.
    During some performance tests, she had more opportunities than me. I felt happy for her, but I also felt bad for myself.
    Errors:

    • "In some performances test""During some performance tests" (Use "performance tests" as plural).
    • "She held a chances than me""She had more opportunities than me" ("held a chances" is incorrect; "had more opportunities" is the correct phrase).
    • "I felt happy for her but I felt bad for me.""I felt happy for her, but I also felt bad for myself." ("bad for me" should be "bad for myself").
  5. I think I was very young.
    →  (Correct, but can be expanded for clarity: "Looking back, I think I was very young and immature." )

  6. She haven't upset to me at all.
    She has never been upset with me at all.
    Error:

    • "She haven't""She has never been", as "has" is needed with "never been."
    • "Upset to me""Upset with me", as "upset" is followed by "with," not "to."
  7. Everyday she said I am okay let 's do it your way.
    Every day, she said, "I'm okay, let's do it your way."
    Errors:

    • "Everyday""Every day", because "every day" (two words) is correct when referring to time.
    • "I am okay let 's do it your way.""I'm okay, let's do it your way." (Correct punctuation and contraction "I'm" for natural speech).
  8. She was very kind.
    (Correct, no change needed.)

  9. We have similar things Wedding day, having a baby. which happened in a same years .So we was going every conversation well.
    We have some things in common, like our wedding day and having a baby, which happened in the same year. So, we were able to have good conversations about them.
    Errors:

    • "We have similar things""We have some things in common."
    • "Wedding day, having a baby.""Like our wedding day and having a baby," (Clarified the meaning).
    • "Which happened in a same years""Which happened in the same year." ("A same years" is incorrect; "the same year" is correct).
    • "So we was going every conversation well.""So, we were able to have good conversations about them." ("We was" should be "We were," and "going every conversation well" is unnatural).

Final Edited Text:

On the other hand, I feel jealous of her. We used to have group blind dates with other boys often. Another friend and I kept it from her.

During some performance tests, she had more opportunities than me. I felt happy for her, but I also felt bad for myself. Looking back, I think I was very young and immature.

She has never been upset with me at all. Every day, she said, "I'm okay, let's do it your way." She was very kind.

We have some things in common, like our wedding day and having a baby, which happened in the same year. So, we were able to have good conversations about them.


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