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I have a best friend who I could talk about a secret and share some concerns. We've known from high school. At back then I went ahead every way. We everyday got along, I used to look after her about violin skills and informations about that. I went to higher universty than her. I got a many chances than her. When we went to same an ochchestra I felt happy. But I am surprised that I see to her. After get in social field, she was better than me I tought she had more practice and efforts.

I have a best friend who I could talk about a secret and share some concerns. We've known from high school. At back then I went ahead every way. We everyday got along, I used to look after her about violin skills and informations about that. I went to higher universty than her. I got a many chances than her. When we went to same an ochchestra I felt happy. But I am surprised that I see to her. After get in social field, she was better than me I tought she had more practice and efforts.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. I have a best friend who I could talk about a secret and share some concerns.
    I have a best friend with whom I can share secrets and concerns.
    Error: "A best friend""Best friend" doesn't need "a", and "could talk about a secret" is unnatural. "With whom I can share secrets" sounds more natural.

  2. We've known from high school.
    We have known each other since high school.
    Error: "We've known" should be "We have known each other". "From high school" should be "since high school", as "since" is used for time references.

  3. At back then I went ahead every way.
    Back then, I took the lead in many ways.
    Error: "At back then""Back then" (Remove "at", as "back then" is already an adverbial phrase). "I went ahead every way" is unclear and should be "I took the lead in many ways."

  4. We everyday got along, I used to look after her about violin skills and informations about that.
    We got along every day. I used to help her with her violin skills and provide her with information about it.
    Error: "We everyday got along" should be "We got along every day". "Look after her about violin skills" is incorrect; "help her with her violin skills" is more natural. "Informations" is incorrect because "information" is uncountable.

  5. I went to higher universty than her.
    I went to a higher-ranking university than she did.
    Error: "Higher universty""higher-ranking university". "Than her" should be "than she did" to complete the comparison.

  6. I got a many chances than her.
    I got more opportunities than she did.
    Error: "A many chances" is incorrect; use "more opportunities". "Than her" should be "than she did".

  7. When we went to same an ochchestra I felt happy.
    When we joined the same orchestra, I felt happy.
    Error: "Went to same an ochchestra" should be "joined the same orchestra". "Same an" is incorrect; use "the same". Spelling error in "ochchestra""orchestra".

  8. But I am surprised that I see to her.
    But I was surprised when I saw her.
    Error: "I am surprised that I see to her""I was surprised when I saw her". The sentence is in past tense, so "am" should be "was", and "see to her" is unnatural.

  9. After get in social field, she was better than me I tought she had more practice and efforts.
    After entering the professional field, she became better than me. I thought she had practiced more and put in more effort.
    Error: "After get in social field" should be "After entering the professional field". "She was better than me" should be "she became better than me". "I tought" is a spelling mistake; correct it to "I thought". "More practice and efforts""practiced more and put in more effort".


Final Edited Text:

I have a best friend with whom I can share secrets and concerns. We have known each other since high school. Back then, I took the lead in many ways. We got along every day, and I used to help her with her violin skills and provide her with information about it.

I went to a higher-ranking university than she did and had more opportunities than she did. When we joined the same orchestra, I felt happy. But I was surprised when I saw her after entering the professional field. She became better than me. I thought she had practiced more and put in more effort.


 


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