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Bicycles on sidewalks

We should allow bicycles on sidewalks because it cyclists can be dangerous when they should ride bicycles on roads since cyclists can have an accident by crashing with cars.On the other hand, some people say that it can be dangerous when cyclists should ride bicycles on sidewalks because they can have an accident by crashing with people who are walking down the sidewalks. Then this means that it can be dangerous in every where. However, it can be more risky when cyclists have an accident with cars. Because of this reason I think we must allow bicycles on sidewalks.

We should allow bicycles on sidewalks because it cyclists can be dangerous when they should ride bicycles on roads since cyclists can have an accident by crashing with cars.On the other hand, some people say that it can be dangerous when cyclists should ride bicycles on sidewalks because they can have an accident by crashing with people who are walking down the sidewalks. Then this means that it can be dangerous in every where. However, it can be more risky when cyclists have an accident with cars. Because of this reason I think we must allow bicycles on sidewalks.

 

Corrected Version:

We should allow bicycles on sidewalks because cyclists can be dangerous when they ride on roads, as they might crash into cars. On the other hand, some people say it can be dangerous for cyclists to ride on sidewalks because they might crash into pedestrians. This means it can be dangerous everywhere. However, it is more risky for cyclists to have an accident with cars. For this reason, I think we should allow bicycles on sidewalks.


Explanation:

  1. "It cyclists" → "cyclists" (subject-verb agreement issue)
  2. "when they should ride bicycles on roads" → "when they ride on roads" (unnecessary "should")
  3. "by crashing with cars" → "crash into cars" (more natural phrasing)
  4. "it can be dangerous when cyclists should ride bicycles on sidewalks" → "it can be dangerous for cyclists to ride on sidewalks" (clarity and correct structure)
  5. "it can be more risky when cyclists have an accident with cars" → "it is more risky for cyclists to have an accident with cars" (proper structure and phrasing)

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