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When I was young I didn't often caught a cold and didn't have allergic. From somedays I often show up to swollen eyes and stuffy nose when it dry. Doctor said body concstituion could changes. When I got that symptoms, eye pain show up too. I heared that when the immune system is weakness, usually weak body part could be pain. It's one of the symptoms it hard to hang in there. These weeks I took some rest more than usually. I worried that catch a cold from me.

When I was young I didn't often caught a cold and didn't have allergic. From somedays I often show up to swollen eyes and stuffy nose when it dry. Doctor said body concstituion could changes. When I got that symptoms, eye pain show up too. I heared that when the immune system is weakness, usually weak body part could be pain. It's one of the symptoms it hard to hang in there. These weeks I took some rest more than usually. I worried that catch a cold from me.
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Here are the corrections:

  1. Original: When I was young I didn't often caught a cold and didn't have allergic.
    Corrected: When I was young, I didn’t often catch colds and didn’t have allergies.
    Error: "Caught" should be "catch" (past tense with "did" uses the base verb). "Allergic" is an adjective, but "allergies" is needed as a noun.

  2. Original: From somedays I often show up to swollen eyes and stuffy nose when it dry.
    Corrected: Recently, I have often had swollen eyes and a stuffy nose when the air is dry.
    Error: "From somedays" → "Recently" (more natural). "Show up to" is incorrect; "have" is the correct verb. "It dry" should be "the air is dry" for clarity.

  3. Original: Doctor said body concstituion could changes.
    Corrected: The doctor said body constitution could change.
    Error: "Doctor" should be "The doctor" (article needed). "Concstituion" is a typo, corrected to "constitution." "Could changes" should be "could change" (modal verb "could" is followed by the base verb).

  4. Original: When I got that symptoms, eye pain show up too.
    Corrected: When I get those symptoms, my eyes hurt too.
    Error: "Got" should be "get" (present tense for recurring events). "That symptoms" should be "those symptoms" (plural agreement). "Eye pain show up" should be "my eyes hurt" (more natural phrasing).

  5. Original: I heared that when the immune system is weakness, usually weak body part could be pain.
    Corrected: I heard that when the immune system is weak, the weakest body part usually feels pain.
    Error: "Heared" should be "heard" (correct past tense). "Is weakness" should be "is weak" (adjective, not noun). "Could be pain" should be "feels pain" (verb correction).

  6. Original: It's one of the symptoms it hard to hang in there.
    Corrected: It’s one of the symptoms that makes it hard to endure.
    Error: "It hard to hang in there" is unclear; "makes it hard to endure" is more natural.

  7. Original: These weeks I took some rest more than usually.
    Corrected: These past weeks, I have rested more than usual.
    Error: "These weeks" → "These past weeks" (more natural phrasing). "Took" should be "have rested" (present perfect for ongoing action). "More than usually" should be "more than usual" (correct form).

  8. Original: I worried that catch a cold from me.
    Corrected: I’m worried that someone might catch a cold from me.
    Error: "I worried" should be "I'm worried" (present tense). "That catch" should be "that someone might catch" (correct grammar structure).


Final, Edited Text:

When I was young, I didn’t often catch colds and didn’t have allergies. Recently, I have often had swollen eyes and a stuffy nose when the air is dry. The doctor said body constitution could change.

When I get those symptoms, my eyes hurt too. I heard that when the immune system is weak, the weakest body part usually feels pain. It’s one of the symptoms that makes it hard to endure.

These past weeks, I have rested more than usual. I’m worried that someone might catch a cold from me.


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