Lastly, some people think choosing a job which we want makes us happy, but that's not true. When we choose a job that we want and fail, we will not be stressed of the job, but we will be stressed because of the loan for our house and many other things.
Lastly, some people think choosing a job which we want makes us happy, but that's not true. When we choose a job that we want and fail, we will not be stressed of the job, but we will be stressed because of the loan for our house and many other things.
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CORRECTION:
I think money is the most important thing, and here's why.
First, money makes our lives comfortable. For example, when we earn a lot of money, we can do anything we want, and that contributes to our happiness.
Secondly, our sons and daughters can live well. For example, if I earn $1 million through work and then pass away, my children will be able to live comfortably using that money.
Lastly, some people believe that choosing a job we love will make us happy, but that's not necessarily true. If we choose a job we want but fail, we won’t be stressed by the job itself. Instead, we’ll feel the pressure of financial burdens, like a mortgage or other debts.
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Explanation of mistakes:
"Fiirst" → Corrected to "First" (spelling error).
"money makes our life comfortable" → Changed to "money makes our lives comfortable" to match plural usage (referring to both the speaker's life and others' lives).
"our son and daughters" → Corrected to "our sons and daughters" for proper plural form.
"when I got $1 million by working, and die" → Revised to "if I earn $1 million through work and then pass away" for clarity and proper verb tense.
"these money" → Corrected to "that money" for grammatical accuracy. "Money" is uncountable, so "these" is incorrect here.
"we will not be stressed of the job" → Changed to "we won’t be stressed by the job" for proper phrasing.
"loan for our house" → Adjusted to "mortgage or other debts" for more natural phrasing and to reflect a common financial situation.
수강정보
필리핀 전화영어 주 5회 10분 24주
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Edleth
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Debate Pro Junior 2
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